If one looks at an ancient, civilized society throughout history, they would know, the greatest eras in that society are those time that general welfare of people was the best. I live in Iran with the history of 5000 years and 2000 years of civilized society. Iran's history has been thought to us since the age of 10 and I think one thing is clear in it that whenever the society's overall welfare was the greatest, the more glory the country had. one of the greatest times for Iran- culture wise, art wise and military power wise- is Safaviyeh's government. Most of Iran's greatest artworks from modern governments belong to this dynasty. And one obvious fact about this epoch is the great social welfare. the number of the poor was so little the minimum amount of wage had increased and people's hope towards making a greater life for themselves had escalated.
having more welfare means the less class difference in the country. you know that there are always some in a society that are considered the wealthy. and there are some that are considered the poor. the less the difference between these two classes, the more the country's greatness is. the reason might lay in the fact that when the class differences are high in a social order most of governments energy, time and money is consumed for filling this gap and there is no resource left to put into making the nation glorious. because the nation should first go from a low level one to a mediocre one and from there try to reach the glory it expects.
the grandeur of society is dependent on all people's part. If every member of a civilization is concerned about its development then there will form a movement that moves the nation towards its best. as a case, we can see Japan as a notable nation in this. in the Tsunami happened about 10 years ago aside from its government great management of the situation one thing that caught everybody's attention was people's participation in solving every little issue that came up. I have read that people's participation in these situations goes back to the belief that everyone in society has a responsibility to other members and there is a concept referred to as shame that is caused by not being aware of your responsibility towards other members.
and finally, greatness is achieved not by a portion of people but the nation as a whole. All the great movements in history are formed by all people from different classes. So by looking at society as a whole, we can have a more accurate picture of what the country or nation is considered as. Although scientist, governors, and artists are deputies of social welfare but having great artists or scientist does not mean a great nation.
to conclude I have to say that one or two classes of a society can not a give a good and complete picture of what is the state of the society as a whole. for having an actual image of a nation's state, we need samples of all social classes and for a country's greatness, we need all classes of society to feel great.
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- The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disag 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eatest, the more glory the country had. one of the greatest times for Iran- culture...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, so, then, i think, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2473.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6052141527 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50817043416 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472998137803 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1636149448 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.041666667 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41666666667 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142344160509 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451930282449 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04334424405 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872927380224 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488081403805 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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