In this argument, the vice president of Quiot Manufacturing recommended that the working hours of its workers needs to be shorten in order to prevent on-the-job accidents. He also presented some evidences to reinforce his words which might look cogent at first but is baseless when analyzed carefully.
First of all, on the basis of the analogous data, the vice president drew out the accident rate of Quiot in comparison with Panoply Industries plant. While examining this data, the author considered only the hours of the work shift and derived a rigid conclusion. The author required to considered all the factors that will led to on-the-job-accidents such as malfunctioning of machineries, lack of team coordination, workers carelessness, workload and working hours. With the consideration of all these factors can help to demonstrate the statement a more persuasive manner.
Moreover, the kind of work carried out on these two disparate plants is also missing in the argument which can also prove to be one of the vital parameter while deciding the brighter side of the argument. For example, Quiot Manufacturing might be dealing with on-sight job which requires more laborious effort while Panoply plant may be having desk work which does not required the workers to get engaged in more life threatening events as that of Quiot's workers. Therefore, this might be the reason that Panoply has less number of on-the-job accidents listed than Quiot. As this information is lacking in the argument, the author failed to prove his allegation to support the evidence.
Finally, the author stated that the reason for the accidents can be exhaustion and sleep deprivation and thus reducing the work hours can help the workers to get a proper sleep which can boast their productivity that ultimately resulting in the declination in the rate of accidents. However, even if we assume that tiredness and less sleep is the cause for the accidents, it can have multiple facets. For example, the workers may be get exhausted due less stamina, individual capacity and so on. Similarly, sleep deprivation can be cause due to late night hang outs, early shifts and so on. Thus, a background study is needed to assert this reason.
With all these uncertainties, the author is unsuccessful in proving his assertion. The absence of efficient analysis while comparing the analogous locations, reason for accidents and so on, results in proving the argument less cogent.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
some duplicates among 3 arguments.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2011 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.76 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.93 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 530, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...so on. Similarly, sleep deprivation can be cause due to late night hang outs, early shif...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... The absence of efficient analysis while comparing the analogous locations, reaso...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, similarly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18295739348 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92830733112 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511278195489 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3381474817 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.647058824 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 5.70786347227 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184389151638 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615536614602 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713453465931 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106161953365 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697326352078 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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