The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of quiot manufacturing in memo suggests that to reduce number of on job accidents at quiot manufacturing and there by increase their productivity ,they should reduce each of three work shifts by one hour so assuming that employees will get adequate amount of sleep. The arguer strengthen his argument by comparing quiot manufacturing with nearby panoply industry industries plant he claims that quiot had 30 percent more on job accident than panoply where the work shift are one hour shorter than theirs.Moreover, he indirectly assumes that fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers are main reason behind. On first look this argument looks to be cogent but by closely examining we can see there are certain logical flaws.
Firstly,the arguer takes in to account the jobs accident of only year there me be chances that in previous years jobs accident are more in panoply manufacturing .Moreover, arguer directly compare quiont industry with panoply industries assuming that both the manufacturing has same level of risk involved .There is no clear evidence of the risk level in both manufacturing.It could be possible that quoint has higher risk than that of panoply.There is no mention of machinery used in both the companies. It can be possible that panoply manufacturing has full automation thereby reducing number of people involved in operating machines.so it cannot compared on this basis .
Secondly,the arguer has not provided any dependency of sleep deprivation and fatigue on job accidents . So, one cannot say that on job accident are due stress and sleep deprivation.Here, arguer assumes that by shortening each of three work shifts by one hour so that time saved will be used by employer to sleep. It is possible that worker use this time for other activities also. so , this argument or suggestion does not seem to be logical.
Lastly,the arguer relates productivity with on job accidents . The productivity of any industry depends only several factors like machinery used, automation,trained workers, etc.One cannot relate it directly to number of on job accidents. So, to increase productivity manufacturing should train their employees, used latest machinery, proper use of human resource, giving deadlines ,etc.This will be good way to increase productivity rather than shortening each of three work shifts by one hour.
In sum,quiot manufacturing to increase productivity and reduce on job accident it should train there workers and employ better machinery rather than reducing time of each of three work shifts.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2103 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.08 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.731 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.358 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33995037221 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03981352835 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473945409429 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 123.051920537 57.8364921388 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 165.538461538 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 23.324526521 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.25449101796 533% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345444925518 0.218282227539 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113134484733 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1245672055 0.0701772020484 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196300957453 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133852124153 0.0628817314937 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 12.3882235529 234% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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