The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.
Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.’
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of this proposal to enable Omega university graduates secure better jobs offers an argument but to move forward on the proposal would require more information and thought. This author’s argument doesn’t make a cogent case for terminate student evaluation of professors. There may be hidden factors that dean doesn’t estimate.
Firstly, the author fails to mention the nature of the evaluation procedure is obligatory or voluntary. Furthermore no evidence about the number of Omega students who participate in the procedure haven’t provided by the dean. Lacking such evidence is entirely possible that those numbers are insignificant; in which case terminating the procedure is unlikely to have any effect on the grade average of students. Moreover the author implies that professors gave the students higher grades due to get better evaluation from students. However, the increase in grades could have been due to the increased efforts by the professors to get better evaluation. Such evidence would tend to weaken the argument.
Secondly, the argument claims without warrant that held what true fifteen years ago will hold true today. It might be possible that Omega University’s newly enrolled students are brighter than previous year students which eventually cause the increase in the grades. In addition, if there are changes in exam pattern which are favorable for students to perform well, then students must get higher grades. Unless the students don’t alter within the years, terminating the evaluation cannot be used to effectively back the author’s argument.
Even if the evaluation procedure has resulted in grade inflation at Omega, the dean’s claim that grade inflation explains why Omega graduates are less successful than Alpha graduate in getting job is unjustified. Perhaps Alpha’s circumstance correlative job skills, or there are some workshops that prepare students for job market. Likewise perhaps Alpha University has effectively communication with job market and employer. In short, without consider other factors that might contribute to lack of success in getting jobs, the dean cannot conclude that if Omega curbs its grades inflation employers will be more likely to hire Omega graduates. Regardless of whether getting better job for graduates is accessible or not, the author doesn’t effectively show a connection between deflated grades and getting secure better job.
Finally, even if the dean substantiates all of the foregoing assumptions, the dean’s assertion that Omega must terminate its valuation procedure to enable its graduation to find better secure jobs are still unwarranted. Because the dean doesn’t provide any criteria to estimate the mean of ‘better secure jobs’. Is it mean to just get more job placements or high salary works? And how we should compare the outcomes of Omega and Alpha University?
Examining all various angles and factors involved with improving inflated grades, the argument does not justify terminating the evaluation. While the proposal does highlight a possibility, more information is required to warrant any action.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2568 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.306 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.712 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 207 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 159 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 119 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.559 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2701.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 478.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65062761506 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9694056887 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512552301255 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 856.8 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7940027346 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.541666667 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215758690142 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065909764571 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554207536777 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114009978214 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471380392891 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.3550499002 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.49 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 98.500998004 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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