The following appeared as a memorandum from the Human Resources director at Dexter Gorman Instruments, a company that manufactures saxophones.
"On this year's survey about work habits, our employees tended to strongly agree with the idea that if they took less time to complete their assigned work, the quality of their work would suffer. However, we recently conducted an internal study that proves this idea wrong. Managers across several divisions identified an overtime group: the employees who worked an average of 48 or more hours per week over the past year instead of the expected 40 hours per week. We then looked at the number of documented work errors produced by all of our employees during the past year and found that the overtime group was responsible for significantly more work errors overall than their fellow employees. On the basis of these findings, our recommendation to the company president is to require employees at Dexter Gorman Instruments to complete their work during the regular 40-hour work week and allow overtime only for urgent circumstances."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the message from the human resource department director at Dexter Gorman instruments, the author concludes that work error is produced by those who do overtime work. However, the author supports the argument with the three assumptions, that if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument.
First of all the writer presumes, without evidence, Was the internal study conducted scientifically? There may be a day or two in a week where the employee has worked for fewer hours than the usual time and overworked on the next day to overcome the loss. At the time of the study, there were no criteria to ask them whether the overwork was due to the company or on their own. Perhaps, the study organizer must consider a few points like checking the daily duration of working, the productivity given by them. It is also possible that a study was conducted to check the work and didn't notice that the employee did their work when they stayed for overtime or they had a party or played a game. If an employee has played a game for three days a week and asks and starts working for the rest of four days then there would be a workload on their head which will push them to work even if they are tired and lead them in making an error due to the tired mind. If either of these scenarios proves true the assertion of the manager significantly hampers.
Second, was the company given time-based tasks? The company may not have given the work to complete based on time. The employee may take the weekly deadline for granted and fail to complete it daily due to their laziness, or enjoyment which led them to do overtime work. Like, if the company has asked the employee to finish three files within two hours that would keep pressure on them( pressure of deadline). This would push them to work, this may not allow the employee to take lightly and the problem of error would be automatically solved by the employees. This will also make them understand that the amount of work which can be over time has to be done in a serious manner and if the study has not been done in this way then there is a possibility of the error in the study which mistakenly has been predicted as a serious issue. Perhaps if this is the case then the manager should take hourly reports of the work. These details will show the detailing and validity of the study. That would substantially increase the credibility of the argument.
Finally, what was the assurance that overtime work they did priority wasn't urgent? The employee who worked overtime and made errors may have done the work under the peer pressure of the new project and that leads them to make errors. That urgent work also creates mistakes done by them. To clarify this point more data is needed before a firm conclusion is reached. If the manager answers the above three questions, it will be possible to fully evaluate the validity of the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 521 350
No. of Characters: 2350 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.778 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.511 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.4 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.652 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.668 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.444 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the persuasiveness of the argument. First of all the writer presumes, withou...
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Line 2, column 583, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...udy was conducted to check the work and didnt notice that the employee did their work...
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Line 2, column 959, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... making an error due to the tired mind. If either of these scenarios proves true t...
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Line 4, column 660, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a serious manner" with adverb for "serious"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...k which can be over time has to be done in a serious manner and if the study has not been done in t...
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Line 6, column 71, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...ce that overtime work they did priority wasnt urgent? The employee who worked overtim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 519.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6204238921 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47002816298 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452793834297 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7305854178 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.260869565 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5652173913 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.34782608696 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153077898366 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466399405664 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465107354976 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111264650824 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387682445106 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.5979740519 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.