The following appeared in a memorandum from the planning department of an electric power company."Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy. At the same time, manufacturers are now marketing many home appli

According to the author, this area's residents like to store energy at home gradually, and there are new appliances and passive sloar heating equipments in the market. Thus the author predicted that the demands of electicity for this area will not increase hence the new construction of generating plants will not be necessary either. While given the reasons , the judgements by the author are problematic.Let's rexamine them including ,the users and appliants and generating plants carefully.

To begin with, the rencet survey isn't convincing without the range of residents and the reasons why they conserve energy. In this survey, the author merely tell us more and more residents are willing to store power but does not tell us how many of them in total, which means we do not know the people's portion among the whole residents. Maybe just a few people have a try of storing energy at home. So in this condition it could not represent the trend of this area. Moreover, the author does not develve into this survey to find out why they want to do so. There is a high possility the the electricity price is too high that these residents can not afford to it. This would make the author reshedule the strategey of the electric power company.

Secondly,the emergence of new saving-enery appliances shows no relevance to the decreasing of electricity using. The author notes that the manufactures are marketing new appliances which could save half energy than before, meanwhile the new technology of insualtion and passive solar heating will reduce the demands of electricity enery for heating. While the author does not mentions how many people bought these appliances.Due to the stability of home appliances like fridges,maybe there are few people will change their appliances in well conditions. What's more, the new technology of inslation and passive solar heating is not presented as equipments for home use, the author does not tell us when these new technology will appear in themarket, so we can not conclude the demands of electricity will not increase.

Finally, as the author predicts thatr the demands of electriciy will not increase, there is an important issue we need to notice that the author suggests that the company needn't build new plants given the power generating by three plants which built twenty years ago is enough. This prediction is precarious by the fact that the three panlts have been in working for twenty years, duo to the consideration of safety, I suggest the author to evaluate the plants first to make sure their stability then to make further choice.

In conclusion, the author does not show the evidence to prove that the demands of electricity is declining, he should make a wide survey to make sure whether his predicment is right.

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Average: 3.5 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 463.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01295896328 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69507132477 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479481641469 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.257197296 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.529411765 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2352941176 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115083703345 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437791082686 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318039310362 0.0701772020484 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0623720411605 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327087174675 0.0628817314937 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Sentence: According to the author, this area's residents like to store energy at home gradually, and there are new appliances and passive sloar heating equipments in the market.
Error: sloar Suggestion: soar

Sentence: Thus the author predicted that the demands of electicity for this area will not increase hence the new construction of generating plants will not be necessary either.
Error: electicity Suggestion: electricity

Sentence: While given the reasons , the judgements by the author are problematic.Let's rexamine them including ,the users and appliants and generating plants carefully.
Error: rexamine Suggestion: examine
Error: appliants Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: To begin with, the rencet survey isn't convincing without the range of residents and the reasons why they conserve energy.
Error: isn Suggestion: ion
Error: rencet Suggestion: rent

Sentence: Moreover, the author does not develve into this survey to find out why they want to do so.
Error: develve Suggestion: devolve

Sentence: There is a high possility the the electricity price is too high that these residents can not afford to it.
Error: possility Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: This would make the author reshedule the strategey of the electric power company.
Error: strategey Suggestion: strategy
Error: reshedule Suggestion: resemble

Sentence: Secondly,the emergence of new saving-enery appliances shows no relevance to the decreasing of electricity using.
Error: saving-enery Suggestion: saving every

Sentence: The author notes that the manufactures are marketing new appliances which could save half energy than before, meanwhile the new technology of insualtion and passive solar heating will reduce the demands of electricity enery for heating.
Error: insualtion Suggestion: insulation
Error: enery Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: What's more, the new technology of inslation and passive solar heating is not presented as equipments for home use, the author does not tell us when these new technology will appear in themarket, so we can not conclude the demands of electricity will not increase.
Error: inslation Suggestion: inflation
Error: themarket Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Finally, as the author predicts thatr the demands of electriciy will not increase, there is an important issue we need to notice that the author suggests that the company needn't build new plants given the power generating by three plants which built twenty years ago is enough.
Error: needn Suggestion: need
Error: electriciy Suggestion: electricity
Error: thatr Suggestion: thats

Sentence: This prediction is precarious by the fact that the three panlts have been in working for twenty years, duo to the consideration of safety, I suggest the author to evaluate the plants first to make sure their stability then to make further choice.
Error: duo Suggestion: do
Error: panlts Suggestion: pants

Sentence: In conclusion, the author does not show the evidence to prove that the demands of electricity is declining, he should make a wide survey to make sure whether his predicment is right.
Error: predicment Suggestion: predicament

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2266 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.832 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.544 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.489 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5