It is argued that, in order to solve the traffice problem in Waymarsh, the author suggests the policy in Garville should be taken to their place. Given that the commuting time was doubled than three years ago while the new road construction was obstacled by funding and potential complains by residents. While the city Garville took a good implement that the people who commute by bikes will be rewarded by the couponsfor tickets, even the pollution levels have dropped down since then. Due to the successful pratice in Garville, the author's suggestion seems to be operative while there are some loopholes in this statement. Let's reexmaine it carefully.
To begin with, the author does not make clear what caused the taffic problem. Merely the double commuting time could not draw any useful conclusion. Maybe with the development of Waymarsh, there were more and more people drove to work while less of them take other methods like bus or metros. In this supposition, the taffic problem could be caused by increasing number of vehicles. Moreover, there are two survey of the trafiic problem while the author does not tell us the people invovled in this investigation recently are the asme group which were surveyed three years ago. Because different people may provide various result on the same traffic issues, maybe the people took the survey recently were all commuting by bus while that group of people drove to work three years ago. In this point the survey is not convincing to prove the suggestion.
In addtion, the two cities are not comparable on traffic issues due to many different factors, let alone the policy of riding bikes to work with awards. Firstly, the locations and roads are different between the two places. In that maybe the Waymarsh is a developing city where more and more people living in, so the infrastructure construction including roads has not catch up with the increasing people moving in, so there are traffic problems. While the Garville maybe just a small city where few people working there, due to the policy given by the authority, it is highly possible that the people do not live very far from the work place, so the do not need so many cars meanwhile the commuting time is always short. Secondly, on the other hand, maybe the Waymash is a large palce so people have to take cars or at least buses to work, so it is not feasible for them to ride bikes. In additon to the roads to work full of cars, it is not wise to ride bikes among the vehicles whose polluted gas is harmful to people. Thirdly, the author does not show us the finacial condtion and new road plan to us , so it is not impossible to build new roads even if it will disturb some residents which the number of them still unclear, if few , this is another way to sovlve the problem with proper policy to the disturbed residents.
In conclusion, the suggestion made by the author is not compelling as there are no obvious evidence to prove the neccestiy of practicing the policy taken in another city. The author should make a wide survey to make the taffice peoblem more clear.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 540 350
No. of Characters: 2494 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.821 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.619 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.346 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.918 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.476 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 535, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...the successful pratice in Garville, the authors suggestion seems to be operative while ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 408, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'surveys'?
Suggestion: surveys
...er of vehicles. Moreover, there are two survey of the trafiic problem while the author...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 408, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'survey' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'surveys'.
Suggestion: surveys
...er of vehicles. Moreover, there are two survey of the trafiic problem while the author...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 828, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'proving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: proving
...this point the survey is not convincing to prove the suggestion. In addtion, the two ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...not comparable on traffic issues due to many different factors, let alone the policy of riding...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'caught'.
Suggestion: caught
...re construction including roads has not catch up with the increasing people moving in...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 648, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...t live very far from the work place, so the do not need so many cars meanwhile the com...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1105, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...inacial condtion and new road plan to us , so it is not impossible to build new ro...
^^
Line 5, column 1236, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...the number of them still unclear, if few , this is another way to sovlve the probl...
^^
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ty. The author should make a wide survey to make the taffice peoblem more clear.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, while, at least, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 540.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72407407407 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42870663024 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462962962963 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0009694631 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.476190476 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159034058909 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470954790201 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407649188147 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956786136268 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571224409389 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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