The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Health Naturally, a small but expanding chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products.
"Our previous experience has been that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build one of our new stores in Plainsville, which clearly has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise equipment are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight-training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in a program called Fitness for Life, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In a memorandum written by the vice president of Health Naturally, a small-scaled but expanding company specialized in the sales of health-related products and health-oriented food, he proposed setting up a new store in Plainsville based on some reasons. While his recommendation might hold water, it rests on some unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, drastically weakens the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus, valid evidence must be provided for the following assumptions mentioned below.
First, he assumes that because shops selling running shoes and equipment for exercise in Plainsville just recently started to record massive sales, this would mean that the residents of Plainsville are becoming particular about their health and thus they should for the food they eat. But this might not be true, perhaps there is a marathon competition going on in town and so, many residents interested in participating are buying running shoes, but after this game, they would all be returned to normal life where exercising is absent. For this reason, the vice president should inquire from these sport equipment merchants what reason has influenced the recent boast of their sales.
Secondly, he stated that the local health club which almost shut down five years due to low patronage, now has more clients, with the weight-training and aerobics classes full incapacity. However, he fails to tell us what number of people make up these "full" classes, what the number of attendees is. Let's assume that about 1500 people live in Plainsville, but only less than 1% of a population makes up these "full" classes, and this number, unfortunately, might not measure up to the expected number of patronage that would equate to a "good" sale for Health Naturally. Therefore I would recommend that the vice president gets his numbers right by seeking to know how many people attend the local health club.
Thirdly, it would be wrong to predict a new generation of customers just base on the fact that Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in the Fitness for Life program. Because a child is mandated to exercise doesn't mean they would only want to eat grains, fruits, vegetables, and similar nourishing meals. It would also be an error to think that all of these schoolchildren would remain in Plainsville when they're older, or that they would lead healthy lifestyles at an older age when exercising just to get a good grade in the subject is no longer the case.
Finally, even if the evidence provided for the above-mentioned assumptions does support the vice president's claim. If the people who live in Plainsville are truly leading healthy lives, there is no valid evidence to back up the claim that just like other stores, this one would also be successful. This is because several factors are responsible for the success of a business. It is probable that even though Plainsville residents love to eat healthily, Health Naturally products might cost more than what an average person in this area is willing to pay for food. It could also be that a lot of them even grow their food, and thus wouldn't need the services of Health Naturally. Therefore, in this case, sales of Health Naturally products might see as much success as expected. I would thus recommend that the vice president conduct thorough research on things beyond just the interest of people.
In conclusion, while the vice president might have come up with a sound proposal of establishing a branch of the company in Plainsville, more evidence supporting his claims is needed. If he can provide more information to back up his claims, the validity of the argument would be considered strong.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...asses, what the number of attendees is. Lets assume that about 1500 people live in P...
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Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...umber of patronage that would equate to a 'good' sale for Health Natura...
^
Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s;good' sale for Health Naturally. Therefore I would recommend that the vice preside...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 224, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...Because a child is mandated to exercise doesnt mean they would only want to eat grains...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 423, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...ildren would remain in Plainsville when theyre older, or that they would lead healthy ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 632, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... of them even grow their food, and thus wouldnt need the services of Health Naturally. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 28.8173652695 184% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3112.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 606.0 441.139720559 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13531353135 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96155895361 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96901329061 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 311.0 204.123752495 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513201320132 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 938.7 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.848828204 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.454545455 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5454545455 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167967722671 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552951368583 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840914625922 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964596526792 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929103727588 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 98.500998004 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...asses, what the number of attendees is. Lets assume that about 1500 people live in P...
^^^^
Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...umber of patronage that would equate to a 'good' sale for Health Natura...
^
Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s;good' sale for Health Naturally. Therefore I would recommend that the vice preside...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 224, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...Because a child is mandated to exercise doesnt mean they would only want to eat grains...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 423, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...ildren would remain in Plainsville when theyre older, or that they would lead healthy ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 632, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... of them even grow their food, and thus wouldnt need the services of Health Naturally. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 28.8173652695 184% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3112.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 606.0 441.139720559 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13531353135 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96155895361 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96901329061 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 311.0 204.123752495 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513201320132 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 938.7 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.848828204 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.454545455 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5454545455 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167967722671 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552951368583 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840914625922 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964596526792 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929103727588 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 98.500998004 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.