The proposal in the above statement states that with advertisement campaign, more people will join the organization if the hear about the company. The proposal writter assumes that the decline in the membership is due to lack of popularity to the public. However, few more questions needs to be answered to anounce the conceiving possibility as plausible.
The first question cast over the proposal is the reason for the decrease in membership of organization over past years. Perhaps the cause of the decrease is not due to lack of promulgation but due to quality of the service. For example, customers who enrolled in gym membership would enjoy less if the gym environment is filthy, gym equipment is antique, receptionist is unfriendly, and customer service is horrible. Over long period, that customer would most likely to terminate future membership and seek out to enroll into a gym which have better quality. Same would apply for the social organization. If the factors mentioned above are less optional, perhaps people would join after hearing about the services, but they would not enroll in the organization over long term.
Lets say that the company do have some superior quality, it is still hard to say that the advertisement would thrive and be successful. Most people do not favor disruption in their stable environment. Stable environment could include daily routines, stable health, and in this case, the membership from social organization. It is hard to assume that when they hear about the service and benefit of the organization, they would switch from the organization where they already enrolled in.
Lastly, it is unsafe to assume that all of the population in given area attends to public activity or reads local magazines. There are many people in the society who do not read newspaper or attend to activity. If that is the case, then the advertisement may not solve the declining of the social organization membership issue.
In conclusion, the proposal given from argument writer needs further investigation over few questions before anounce the plausible proposal as viable. Perhaps constructing a survery cast to people who live in social organization covered regions to obtain a better understanding of why decline happens and survey for those who enrolled in organization to ask what they enjoyed. Doing so, the organization advertiser can have a better sense of what can be improved. Without those information, the proposal can not be deemed plausible.
- A company should identify those employees who excel at entry level positions and place an emphasis on their training and professional development will increase employees' personal fulfillment and enable them to serve the company to the best of their abili 66
- The following appeared in a newsletter of a social organization: "Since membership in our organization has been declining for the past year, we need to think of new ways to attract members. We need to advertise for our organization in local magazines, as 59
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 2040 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.824 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.916 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...re people will join the organization if the hear about the company. The proposal writter...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...in the organization over long term. Lets say that the company do have some super...
^^^^
Line 7, column 37, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... Lastly, it is unsafe to assume that all of the population in given area attends to pub...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 473, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
... sense of what can be improved. Without those information, the proposal can not be deemed plausib...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, may, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19851116625 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91817111404 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476426799007 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2722774996 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.75 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.15 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184993375995 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588083585215 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528922531745 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104608232843 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205537905545 0.0628817314937 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.