The following appeared as part of an article in the travel section of a newspaper:
"Over the past decade, the restaurant industry in the country of Spiessa has experienced unprecedented growth. This surge can be expected to continue in the coming years, fueled by recent social changes: personal incomes are rising, more leisure time is available, single-person households are more common, and people have a greater interest in gourmet food, as evidenced by a proliferation of publications on the subject."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
The argument concludes that the growth of restaurant industry in the country of Spiessa is going to continue in the coming years. To support this conclusion, the author cites the evidence that the rising personal income, increasing single-person households and people’s increased interest on gourmet food will keep restaurant in Spiessa being popular. I found that this conclusion is not sound, however, because the argument is flawed for following reasons:
First of all, the author readily assumes that the growth of restaurant industry of Spiessa in the past decade has been caused by the social changes mentioned above. However, a lot of factors should be taken into consideration to analyze the success in a specific industry. For example, restaurant industry will always benefit from the thriving tourism industry in the country, it might be possible that Spiessa has been doing very successful in developing the tourism in the country, so that the foreign visitors accounted for the largest proportion of the restaurant consumers. On the other hand, government’s support is also very important to the development of an industry. It could be true that the Spiessa’s government has done some tax-cut scheme to the local restaurants, so that more investor is willing to open a restaurant and most restaurant are able to offer good-quality food with more affordable price. Therefore, the social changes in people’s personal life is not necessary the main cause of the growth of restaurant industry in Spiessa.
Moreover, the guidance from the government is also very vital for the development of restaurant industry in the coming years. The author didn’t mention any plan from government in terms of financial support and regulation reform for the restaurant industry. Rather, it just mentioned the changes from the consumers’ side. If government decide to add tax on restaurant industry or make the regulation stricter in the coming years, more and more restaurant will find it’s hard to maintain the businesses even the consumers are still keen on spending money on restaurant. Hence, it would be imprudent to forecast the growth in restaurant industry with the limited evidence provided.
In summary, this argument is not compelling because it omitted many other factors that should be addressed. To make it more acceptable, the author would have to provide evidence to analyze the main factors that helped the restaurant industry in Spiessa succeed in the past decade. And evidence is also needed to support the fact that government is going to support the restaurant industry in the coming years.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- can be put together with argument 1
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flaws:
as this is ' evidenced by a proliferation of publications on the subject'. we can argue against social changes: personal incomes are rising, more leisure time is available, single-person households are more common, and people have a greater interest in gourmet food.
for example,
'personal incomes are rising,' people may put the extra money for education
'more leisure time is available', people may use the time for traveling
'single-person households are more common', maybe those people are elders
'people have a greater interest in gourmet food', maybe people like to cook at home;
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2148 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.139 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.728 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.816 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 411, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...estaurant industry in the coming years.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, in fact, in summary, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35731414868 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94933027557 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448441247002 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5826846277 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.625 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.70786347227 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278979829558 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107755146372 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063785166522 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190421343315 0.128457276422 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254488344795 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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