The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author states that some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future. However, the author must provide more solid information to strengthen the argument.
The author claims that the twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. However, the author must provide more information to prove that this study is highly reliable. It is like that the result of this study are made by a group of students, and they conduct this experiment and obtain this result based on twenty-year data. However, if these students only have bachelor’s degrees, then we may not be able to totally trust on the result of this study. Also, if these students just use Excel models to analyze the data of these participants, then we may suspect the accuracy of this study. Nevertheless, if these students have doctoral degrees, then we may be able to believe that they have professional abilities to conduct this experiment. As a result, the author must provide us with more thorough information to prove that these researchers have great abilities to make this conclusion.
Furthermore, if this study is just based on two hundred people, the number of the residents of Mentia is more than two million people, then we may suspect if salicylates can also apply to other patients. It is possible that these participants are healthier than other people, and then the researchers can anticipate that these participants can receive positive effects. However, if other people use salicylates, they may not be able to obtain the same result. They may suffer from other negative effects, such as asthmas or having a higher probability to get heart attacks.
It was also likely that these participants could get a higher rewards if they responsed that they had a better results than expected. In order to receive more money, they might tell the true results to the researchers. Therefore, the author must tell us if salicylates will bring other negative effects and if the results of these participants are reliable.
The author states that food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. However, it is possible that if people eat these foods, their bodies may be seriously damaged by salicylates. Because if we just use salicylates as a drug 10 milligram per day to decrease our pains, then we may not excessively consume salicylates. However, if we add salicylates to our foods, then we may absorb more than 500 milligram per day, and this amount of salicylates may seriously damage our bodies and cause other diseases. Thus, the author must provide more reliable information to prove that salicylates can be used as flavor additives for foods.
Salicylates may somewhat improve our health. However, the author must provide more solid information to strengthen the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2436 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.982 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.717 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.261 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.848 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.826 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.2 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: ''.
...a. However, if these students only have bachelor’s degrees, then we may not be able to t...
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Line 8, column 293, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'milligram' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'milligrams'.
Suggestion: milligrams
...if we just use salicylates as a drug 10 milligram per day to decrease our pains, then we ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 461, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'milligram' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'milligrams'.
Suggestion: milligrams
...foods, then we may absorb more than 500 milligram per day, and this amount of salicylates...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 28.8173652695 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2508.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12883435583 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82742152904 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.398773006135 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9253569952 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.043478261 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2608695652 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125715079981 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462925039986 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518625185507 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0733434201857 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319264847089 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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