The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
“The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the west Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring eastern Carpentaria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region’s biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built.”
The writer claims in his letter that there should be no further developments along the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment. However the author fails to provide evidence to support this claim therefore, the argument is flawed and inconclusive.
Firstly, the writer claims that the tufted groundhog "once numbered in millions" would be at risk of extinction. The writer however fails to provide evidence that the population of the tufted groundhog has reduced drastically and fails to give an estimated figure, at the very least, on their current population. For all we know, the tufted groundhog may already be extinct. He also fails to provide evidence that the species are currently habited in the coastal wetlands of West Landsburg. Migration is a high possibility and evidence should be proved to support the claim.
Furthermore, the writer claims that what held in Eastern Carpenteria in 1978 would hold true in West Lansburg in 2004. The writer also equated the sea otter to the tufted groundhog in this statement to indicate how the population declined after the repeal of its sanctuary. This however is flawed because it could be possible that the reason why the sea otter's population declined was due to their inability to migrate to other habitats since their natural habitat is the sea itself. Therefore claiming that the tufted groundhog would have difficulties migrating as well is unfounded. No evidence is provided to support this assertion.
The writer also claims that there should be no development in the region so as to preserve the biodiversity hinting that the tufted groundhog co-habits with other species in that region. There is, however, no evidence to support this claim which could render the argument highly unconvincing. The writer could provide evidence of other species co-habiting along the coastal wetlands of West Landsburg.
In conclusion, the writer may not necessarily be mistaken in his claim that development in that region would negatively affect the tufted groundhog. However, he fails to provide evidence that the population of the groundhog is currently at risk of extinction and development would be ill-advised at the moment.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1850 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.168 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.724 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.75 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
...tlands of West Lansburg to preserve the regions biodiversity and ensure a healthy envir...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...rsity and ensure a healthy environment. However the author fails to provide evidence to...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
...be possible that the reason why the sea otters population declined was due to their in...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 485, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...heir natural habitat is the sea itself. Therefore claiming that the tufted groundhog woul...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... should be no development in the region so as to preserve the biodiversity hinting that ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3156424581 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84944269622 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432960893855 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7981127125 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.941176471 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196249581566 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764695880603 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561129815749 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122939942058 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400027191341 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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