The following is a letter to the editor of the Waymarsh Times.
"Traffic problems here in Waymarsh are obviously reaching record levels. While just three months ago it would take me 15 minutes to get to work, it now takes closer to 25. Waymarsh should follow the example of our neighboring city Gearsville. Last year, Gearsville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work with coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Gearsville have dropped since the policy was implemented, and several friends who live in Gearsville tell me that their trip to work is quicker than it used to be. With the terrible traffic and high pollution in Waymarsh, we must implement a policy similar to Gearsville's."
The author advises that the similar policy to Gearsville should be passed in Waymarsh regarding the terrible traffic condition and the pollution. To support his/ her statement, he/ she quotes the outcomes of the policy in Gearsville, which is claimed to have tackled the traffic congestion and pollution. As the policy may prove useful in Waymarsh, however, the current information cannot support the necessity and feasibility of a solution towards this issue. For further evaluation, more evidence gains significant weight.
First of all, The writer cites his/ her personal experience and claims that now it takes him/ her longer to go to work than three months ago, hence, the traffic condition is regarded as more terrible in Waymarsh. However, I argue that the only personal experience is quite unconvincing. Fisrtly, we are not informed with the exact location and time of the trips. If the they were taken in the rush and non-rush hours respectively. Then, the increase from 15 to 25 minutes is recognized as insignificant. Moreover, the amount of sample is too small to convince us that the traffic condition is gettinig worse these months. Also, there is completely no evidence indicating that the pollution in Waymarsh is quite thorny. Thus, further evidence is needed to prove the degraded traffic condition. If the evidence is unvalid, then, the statement will be challenged.
Moreover, granted that the problem does exist in Waymarsh. The writer compared Waymarsh with Gearsville. However, there is no evidence indicating that the two towns are highly comparable in many ways. If it is the case that one is a metropolitan city and another is rural area, then, we are reluctant to believe the statement. Even if they are comparable, further evidence is needed to prove that the policy did achieve the outcomes, decreasing the pollution and improving the traffic congestion. Without evidence we are not sure whether other factors have contributed to the improvement. Also, only according to the statement from several friends, the argument cannot be supported.
In addition, the author fails to consider the feasibility of the method in Waymarsh. Neither do we know about the potential costs and negative influence. Thus, at least we should have evidence about the feasibility of the policy.
Overall, it is possible that the policy will improve the air quality and traffic condition in Waymarsh. However, the information available now cannot help us evaluate the advice. Thus, only if the aforementioned evidence is provided can we reach a logically sound advice.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2098 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.068 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.719 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.967 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.731 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 349, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the policy may prove useful in Waymarsh, however, the current information cannot ...
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Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'they'?
Suggestion: the; they
...xact location and time of the trips. If the they were taken in the rush and non-rush hou...
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Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'logically sound advice'.
Suggestion: logically sound advice
...ioned evidence is provided can we reach a logically sound advice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, at least, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 16.3942115768 213% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24879227053 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83470443862 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504830917874 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5454199205 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5769230769 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9230769231 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42307692308 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177635951423 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046430019983 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535241614742 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972480233809 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385757697845 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.3550499002 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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