The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the art department at the college.
"In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 percent agreed that participating in an internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40 percent of Linford’s graduating art students had completed an internship. Skyway Designs, located in nearby Linford City, is the perfect company for students to intern with for a number of reasons: They offer internships in all of their departments, so every student is sure to find work that they are interested in. Additionally, their internships offer flexible working hours.Finally, Skyway Designs is known for being one of the best in the design business, as over 80 percent of businesses in Linford City have used the services of Skyway Designs for their design needs. Given the vital role that work experience plays in a student’s success after graduation, we recommend that our art department require all art students to complete an internship with Skyway Designs before graduation."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The alumni of Linford College wrote a letter to the art department at the college claiming that they recommend all art students to complete an internship with skyway design before graduating, as work experience plays a vital role in a student’s success after graduation, but the author does not make a cogent case to conclude that student would have a successful career after working as an intern in skyway design.
The author described the survey statistics that 90% of the college grads agree on the participation for an internship as it may increase their chances of finding a job after graduation, but there is no surety of getting placed, as there are many factors that play a vital role in getting a job, on of them is work experience as the assumption described by the author but it is not enough to get an agreement of getting a job.
Estimated and concluded by the last year data that only 40% of graduating art students had completed an internship, but there is no evidence made by the author about how many of them got a real job, that stat is not efficient or reliable to conclude on the fact that heading on for internship will lead to a successful carrier.
As the prompt described by the author that the Skyway Design is the perfect fit for students to intern before graduation, for several reasons:-
They offer internships in all of their departments, so every student is sure to find work that they are interested in. “Sure” is such a big word to say, there can be a chance that a student doesn’t like the roles provided by the company, or the company doesn’t provide a role needed by the student. There can be enough reasons to be not sure.
Their internship offers flexible working hours and is also nearby Linford city, as stated by the author. The working hours and location can be flexible for students who stay near to the city or in the Linford city but may not be flexible for the students living at distinct locations.
Skyway Designs is known for being one of the best in the design business, as over 80 % of businesses in Linford City have used the services of Skyway Designs for their design needs, but we can’t conclude to the fact that it is the best because there can be several reasons why businesses use their service- it can be the only design company in the city so the businesses may not have the choice or the survey is not conducted all over the city but in just a few areas.
The assumption provided by the author on the argument is not enough to lead to a conclusion that the skyway design is the only company that is best and suited for the students to work for. The survey must have accurate and reliable result to be concluded with proper numbers of students did internship and getting an offer letter of their dream job. There is no disagreement on the assumption that internship and work experience plays a vital role in the further carrier of a student.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 526 350
No. of Characters: 2335 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.789 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.439 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.484 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.481 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.402 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.402 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 524.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57633587786 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5666452866 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.38358778626 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.8473053892 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.398598516 57.8364921388 229% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 199.833333333 119.503703932 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.6666666667 23.324526521 187% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.70786347227 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20286987563 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782040820246 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824122877875 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996819936725 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871739911085 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.0 14.3799401198 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.197005988 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.17 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.0 12.3882235529 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.1389221557 172% => OK
text_standard: 26.0 11.9071856287 218% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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