The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council."An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East M

The author of the argument states that since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work we recommend the daily use of a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism.To support this view, the author also states that study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of coldsHowever, the line of reasoning prsented by the author is full of incomple evidences and unsubstantiae assumption, which renderthhe argument week and unconvincing.

First of all,the author of the argument states that daily use of a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism.The argument fails to consider the possibility of negative effect nutritional supplement which may cause many severe problem to people.Unless we are not sure about nutritional supplement do not have any side effect on people , we cannot say that nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism

Moreover,the author of the argument stes that A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds.The argument fails to consider the possibility that that survey may represt the minority and as result the outcomes are also wrong.Unless we are not sure about that survey is not alter or twisted we cannot say that nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism

Furthermore,the author of the argument states that colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work.The argument fails to consider the possibility that there might be some other factors which result in absent from school and work.People might absent because of various reason for example they take leave for to celebrate party, to go for holiday, events etc.Unless we are not sure about why people absent from school and work we cannot says that daily use of a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism

To conclude, the argument in current state lack substantial ground to make a persuasive case. There the author need to provide more credible evidence to strengthen his or her case claim.

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Average: 4.3 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, may, moreover, so, then, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04714640199 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79585535673 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.384615384615 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 19.7664670659 15% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 134.0 22.8473053892 587% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 676.824119612 57.8364921388 1170% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 678.0 119.503703932 567% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 134.333333333 23.324526521 576% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 28.3333333333 5.70786347227 496% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0587018697694 0.218282227539 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407177142072 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308113616703 0.0701772020484 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0405153621311 0.128457276422 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341947110655 0.0628817314937 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 69.5 14.3799401198 483% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -64.53 48.3550499002 -133% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.1628742515 222% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 55.6 12.197005988 456% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.19 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.67 8.32208582834 152% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 12.3882235529 452% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 55.6 11.1389221557 499% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 56.0 11.9071856287 470% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Sentence: The author of the argument states that since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work we recommend the daily use of a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism.To support this view, the author also states that study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of coldsHowever, the line of reasoning prsented
Error: coldsHowever Suggestion: colds However
Error: prsented Suggestion: presented

Sentence: by the author is full of incomple evidences and unsubstantiae assumption, which renderthhe argument week and unconvincing.
Error: renderthhe Suggestion: render
Error: unsubstantiae Suggestion: unsubstantiated
Error: incomple Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Moreover,the author of the argument stes that A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds.The argument fails to consider the possibility that that survey may represt the minority and as result the outcomes are also wrong.Unless we are not sure about that survey is not alter or twisted we cannot say that nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and
Error: represt Suggestion: repress
Error: stes Suggestion: No alternate word

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argument 1 -- not OK

argument 2 -- not OK

argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 1993 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.814 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.557 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 46 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 36.929 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.472 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.698 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.201 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5