The memo from the business manager of a television station states that over the part year the late night news program has deveoted more to national news and less time to weather and local news. The author recommends to restore the time deveoted to the weather and local news to its previous levels. In order to support his recommendation the author makes several dubious claims such as decrease in the advertisement contracts and increased complaints recieved from the viewers. The arguments provided to support recommendation are unconvincing for several reasons.
Firstly, the author contends that the television station has recieved complaints over the past year regarding the coverage on the weather and local news. However, this claim is unsubstantiated as there is not proper evidence provided on the veiwers actually complaining on alloting less time to the weather and local news. Futhermore, the views might be concern over the quality of the news items provided with respect to the weather and local news. The author need to provide a comprehensive survey from the viewers regarding their opinion on the time allocation, news item quality and their preference on the national news, weather and local news.
Secondly, the author states that the advertising contracts were cancelled with the late night news programs and unreasonably accounts this for the time allocation of weather and local news. However, it is highly likely that the advertisements contracts are decreasing because of the lowering viewship of the late night news program. Author needs to provide adequate information on the viewer ship of the late night news program and also provide data trends of advertisement on other Television stations. This information helps to effectively analyze the proper reason for the drop in the advertisments.
Finally, the author argues that reviving the old timings of the weather and local news on the late night night news program will lead to increase in viewership and revenues. In this contrast, there might drop in viewer ship due to the poor quality of news in this channel and much more interesting programs on the other Television channels. So author should provide details in the trends on viewer ships of the other TV channels in the late night timing. It is also possible that people are sleeping early In the recent times due to weather conditons or any other reason there by leading to drop in viewer ships. Even after increasing the timing of weather and local news if the viewer ships are not rising. Then there may not be any significant increase in the revenues.
To sum up, the arguments of the author could be more eloquent if further information is provided with a proper survey of TV viewers on their preference , more information the advertinsing trends in among various other local channels and finally viewership details of other local channels during the late nights. With out ruling out the alternative explainations, the recommendations cannot considered persuasive.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The memo from the business manager of a television station states that over the part year the late night news program has deveoted more to national news and less time to weather and local news.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: deveoted Suggestion: devoted
Sentence: The author recommends to restore the time deveoted to the weather and local news to its previous levels.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: deveoted Suggestion: devoted
Sentence: In order to support his recommendation the author makes several dubious claims such as decrease in the advertisement contracts and increased complaints recieved from the viewers.
Error: recieved Suggestion: received
Sentence: Firstly, the author contends that the television station has recieved complaints over the past year regarding the coverage on the weather and local news.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: recieved Suggestion: received
Sentence: However, this claim is unsubstantiated as there is not proper evidence provided on the veiwers actually complaining on alloting less time to the weather and local news.
Error: alloting Suggestion: allowing
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: veiwers Suggestion: viewers
Error: unsubstantiated Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, it is highly likely that the advertisements contracts are decreasing because of the lowering viewship of the late night news program.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: viewship Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Author needs to provide adequate information on the viewer ship of the late night news program and also provide data trends of advertisement on other Television stations.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This information helps to effectively analyze the proper reason for the drop in the advertisments.
Error: advertisments Suggestion: advertisements
Sentence: It is also possible that people are sleeping early In the recent times due to weather conditons or any other reason there by leading to drop in viewer ships.
Error: conditons Suggestion: conditions
Sentence: To sum up, the arguments of the author could be more eloquent if further information is provided with a proper survey of TV viewers on their preference , more information the advertinsing trends in among various other local channels and finally viewership details of other local channels during the late nights.
Error: advertinsing Suggestion: advertising
Error: viewership Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: With out ruling out the alternative explainations, the recommendations cannot considered persuasive.
Error: explainations Suggestion: explanations
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 487 350
No. of Characters: 2483 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.698 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.099 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.101 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends restoring'.
Suggestion: recommends restoring
...e to weather and local news. The author recommends to restore the time deveoted to the weather and lo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the time allocation, news item quality and their preference on the national new...
^^
Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: night
... the weather and local news on the late night night news program will lead to increase in v...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 121, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion is provided with a proper survey of TV viewers on their preference , more i...
^^
Line 9, column 133, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ided with a proper survey of TV viewers on their preference , more information t...
^^
Line 9, column 154, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rvey of TV viewers on their preference , more information the advertinsing trend...
^^
Line 9, column 316, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: Without
...local channels during the late nights. With out ruling out the alternative explaination...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, such as, to sum up, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2533.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 487.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20123203285 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79837239018 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.402464065708 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.9 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2725529158 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.65 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.35 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428772923897 0.218282227539 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161494771328 0.0743258471296 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13640498493 0.0701772020484 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267245198955 0.128457276422 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120486957987 0.0628817314937 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.