The following is from a recent email from the Diord Corp. Human Resources Manager: “Tobor Technologies found that mental health problems and mental illness were responsible for about 15 percent of employee sick days. Tobor amended its employee insurance plan so that workers receive the same coverage for mental illness as they do for physical illness. In addition, the company hired an on-site psychologist and created a system that allows workers to schedule confidential counseling appointments. After one year, the number of sick days used by employees declined by 10 percent. Diord Corp. has had an increase in employee sick days over the past two years, so we should introduce a similar insurance plan and counseling program. These measures will surely reduce employee absenteeism and cause an increase in productivity.”
The author describes Diord Corp. which is a company that, after incorporating mental illness into their employees’ insurance plans and hiring an on-site psychologist, observed a decrease in the number of sick days that the employees take. The author urges Tobor Technologies to follow a similar route to reach their end-goals of reducing employee absenteeism and increasing employee productivity. The author, however, does not take into account a large number of factors that prove that this decision would be premature unless studied into further.
Primarily, and most importantly, we do not know anything about both companies. They could be in differing industries, locations, have different sizes, insurance plans, benefits, the complete list would probably reach some hypothetical word limit of this response. How can we completely make a decision for a different company without understanding how the current company compares to the previous one? For example, the finance and gaming industries are known to have long working hours and a poor work-life balance. If Diord Corp. was a compmany in the finance sector, then perhaps letting its employees have easier access to mental health care and specialists really did impact their absenteeism. However, on the other hand, if Tobor Technologies were located in a part of the world where for example a tropical disease was present for the past two years, then including the same benefits would have little to no use. It would be far more beneficial if Tobor Technologies were able to analyze their own location and market to come up with a solution.
For the sake of the argument, let us say that the companies are similar enough in industry and location to be somewhat compared. Then, we have to carefully consider the methods implemented by Diord Corp. to find the results of their experiment. They need to have been using a proper statistically-sound experiment that appropriately represents the entire company’s workers and employees. We have no insight into how this information was gathered and perhaps they only surveyed one department, or asked leading questions in the survey that forced the employees to lie and say their sick days were not due to mental health, given the stigma around mental health in some parts of the world even today. Without knowing more regarding how they got to the results, it is not prudent to implement any changes in Tobor Technologies based on the findings of Diord Corp. And does the timespan of the experiment play a significant role? Take for example, the world pandemic we are in right now. Perhaps the time the experiment was done, there had been a disease or pandemic that caused more people to take sick days, unrelated to mental health. And after one year, the drop in sick days is due to the reduction of the disease not a reduction in mental health.
Again, for the sake of the argument, we can say that Diord Corp. went about the experiment in a way that allows the experiment to be equally as useful for Tobor Technologies. This does not change the fact that Tobor Technologies’s main goal will not have been met. They would like to implement the same measures to “… reduce employee absenteeism and cause an increase in productivity”. Diord Corp. never reports or speaks on employee productivity as a result of their actions. It could very well be the case that with the extra attention and company focus on mental health, employees are more uncomfortable to speak on the cause for their sick days. In this way, employees may be physically present in the workplace, but perhaps are even less productive. This is the exact opposite of Tobor Technologies’s goals.
In conclusion, there is simply not enough research that has been put behind Diord Corp, the experiment or results of the experiment, and the affects that the experiment has had on the workers. Tobor Technologies should not use these results as a justification for their own company decisions.
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- Governments are justified in circumventing civil laws when doing so is vital to the protection of national security 58
- The following is from a recent email from the Diord Corp Human Resources Manager Tobor Technologies found that mental health problems and mental illness were responsible for about 15 percent of employee sick days Tobor amended its employee insurance plan 50
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 398, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...m and increasing employee productivity. The author, however, does not take into acc...
^^^
Line 1, column 446, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...or, however, does not take into account a large number of factors that prove that this decision w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
... a way that allows the experiment to be equally as useful for Tobor Technologies. This doe...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, really, regarding, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3330.0 2260.96107784 147% => OK
No of words: 658.0 441.139720559 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06079027356 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06473204393 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86665782907 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 311.0 204.123752495 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4726443769 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 1020.6 705.55239521 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.323357196 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0625 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5625 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282531495821 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762265746192 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555152457223 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17267676711 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485314943805 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 98.500998004 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 398, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...m and increasing employee productivity. The author, however, does not take into acc...
^^^
Line 1, column 446, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...or, however, does not take into account a large number of factors that prove that this decision w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
... a way that allows the experiment to be equally as useful for Tobor Technologies. This doe...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, really, regarding, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3330.0 2260.96107784 147% => OK
No of words: 658.0 441.139720559 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06079027356 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06473204393 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86665782907 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 311.0 204.123752495 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4726443769 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 1020.6 705.55239521 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.323357196 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0625 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5625 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282531495821 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762265746192 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555152457223 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17267676711 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485314943805 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 98.500998004 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.