In the article, the author suggests The Monarch open a cafe to attract the customer because of the newly opened cafe of a rival. However, There are some flaws and unwarranted assumption.
First, the manager failed to prove enough evidence to show opening cafe would attract more customers. The locals might not like coffee, let alone going to the cafe. Additionally, closing the children's book section might incur the disappointment of children and their parents, leading the drop of the revenue. What's more, the result of national census might not apply to this area. Even if the percentage of the children under ten in surrounding area was dropped, the total number of them might increase. Finally, the author overlooks other method to compete with the rival such as giving customers some discount in the special day.
To wrap it up, this suggestion is impractical for the absence of evidence that opening the cafe would attract the customer as well as misinterpretation of the result of national census and possible negative effect brought by cancellation of children's book section.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the article, the author suggests The Monarch open a cafe to attract the customer because of the newly opened cafe of a rival.
Description: The fragment Monarch open a is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace open with verb, past tense
Sentence: However, There are some flaws and unwarranted assumption.
Error: unwarranted Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To wrap it up, this suggestion is impractical for the absence of evidence that opening the cafe would attract the customer as well as misinterpretation of the result of national census and possible negative effect brought by cancellation of children's book section.
Error: misinterpretation Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 178 350
Minimum 250 words wanted
flaws:
minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 1.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 178 350
No. of Characters: 890 1500
No. of Different Words: 108 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.653 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.682 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 66 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.283 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...rents, leading the drop of the revenue. Whats more, the result of national census mig...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, so, well, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 19.6327345309 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 13.6137724551 7% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 28.8173652695 21% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 918.0 2260.96107784 41% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 178.0 441.139720559 40% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15730337079 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 4.56307096286 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73405674402 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 204.123752495 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623595505618 0.468620217663 133% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 705.55239521 40% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.1365859893 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103136503666 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392021418668 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502523081837 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0846654525304 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425433988217 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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