The statement illustartes that the delivery of power within 5 years is essential to a prosperity of a entity in any fields, wihch seems to be presuasive to some extent but cannot, from my perspective, apply to all the field.
First paragraph
To begin with, it is fairly beneficial in some particular fields like the politic where the abuse of power could lead to calamity to the whole human society. “ Absolute power lead to absolute corruption", this saying examifies what would happen if unsupervised power was hold by a individual for a long period, which could be proved by a considerable number of corruption scandals in socialistic countries, where lack the political system to effectively constrain the authority's power. The people in North Korea, for example, suffer from poverty and low material living condition, while the up class in this country, usually the senior officials of this country, enjoy the world leading life style. Without the internet, however, people in North Korea are still under the illusion that their leader is protecting them from dangerous external environment and "evil" western countries. This is one example of abused authority without the delivery of power.
Second paragraph
Secondly, the change of power happening in a frequent manner also could lead to negative effect. In the science field, for instance, there are plenty of research projects which need considerable fundings and scientists. In those projects, the long term existence of a wise principle scientist is essential. Since in research field, a genius could produce great effect on the process of a project, which could not be made up by the number of assistant stuffs. Also in programming fields, the unexpected substituion of the chief programmer could cause series of problems, since the chief programmer designed the architecture of whole project which cannot be understood easily even with the designing document. With flawed software architecture, the whole systems' performance decrease by about 50% percents, which can hardly be fixed with local optimization.
Third paragraph
To avoid the negative effect of the delivery of power, some special rule should be formulated. In China, the period of power delivery is 10 years, which enables the highest leader to sufficiently implement his policy. In contrast, the former American president Obama was not so lucky. The obama care, which designed as the public medical care for the impoverish people, was suddenly shut down after the current president Trump came to the power, just as various policies of obama's period. Therefore, a appropriate polical system should be formulated in order to prevent the waste of national resources on the condition that the power are constrained.
Final paragraph
To sum up, the delivery of power are essential but the term of power holding and other rules should be carefully formulated. With the deliver of power, the tragedy caused by power abuse coud be prevented. Nevertheless, with appropriate rules, the delivery of power could cause less vices.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...appen if unsupervised power was hold by a individual for a long period, which cou...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a frequent manner" with adverb for "frequent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Suggestion:
...field, for instance, there are plenty of research projects which need considerabl...
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Suggestion: systems'; system's
...flawed software architecture, the whole systems performance decrease by about 50% perce...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun vices is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ules, the delivery of power could cause less vices.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2616.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37166324435 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85851388304 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556468172485 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2628240561 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.8 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.35 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131352263568 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426904303551 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0260966901155 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787126029816 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185475763925 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 100.480337079 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 11.8971910112 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.