In the reading, the author suggests that the university should build a number of new dormitories. As for reasons, the author claims that the increasing enrollment and the increasing rent price of houses nearby should be the determining factors. Additionally, the author suggests that the construction of new dormitory would attract more prospective students. However, the absence of important evidence make the suggestion less convincing.
Firstly, the author suggests the university should build new dormitory in order to meet the need of increasing students. However, the precise data of the enrollment and the increasing rate is missing as well as the current situation of dormitory in the campus. If the current enrollment number is small compared to the total student population in the campus or there are plenty of empty room in the dormitory, there are no necessity to build the new dormitory. Additionally, even assume the enrollment is of a considerable number, there is no guarantee that this trend would continue in the future.
Moreover, the precise price of the rent for near apartment is still missing as important as the the increasing rate of the rent. The price would be increasing in the low speed which is not a big deal to the student, and the original price might be too low. Similarly, the trend of increasing might not last long. All the possible situation discussed above make the increasing price of the rent of surrounding houses a irrelevant factor to the need to build the new dormitory.
Finally, the author failed to prove that the new dormitory would be appealing to the future students. There might be other deciding factors such as the academic ranking or the facilities of the campus as well as the intriguing program. Moreover, even it is true, it is not hard to prove that building a new dormitory means to attract more students, and more enrollments, means to build more dormitory, making it a doom circle.
To wrap it up, the author failed to prove a considerable number of evidence to endorse his suggestion. To strengthen his point of view, the number of current students and the increasing rate of enrollment as well as the price and the increasing rate of the rent nearby are in need.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1811 1500
No. of Different Words: 136 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.829 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.735 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.304 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...rtment is still missing as important as the the increasing rate of the rent. The price...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...rtment is still missing as important as the the increasing rate of the rent. The price...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...price of the rent of surrounding houses a irrelevant factor to the need to build ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, still, then, well, as for, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97066666667 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83927502484 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.384 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1206766732 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.647058824 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17026209035 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661273352718 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514464366491 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108186710911 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465795707198 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.