The argument is written as a part of bank application that claims that opening a jazz club in the city of monroe would be profitable. But there are certain discrepancy in the argument. Here the arguer is stating that the jazz club in monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise, but the grounds on which the statement is relevant are not evinced. Certain points which can be considered to evaluate the argument may include the fact that the other jazz music club which is located 65 miles away won't have better singers and musicians than the new jazz club. Additionally the author's claim about the jazz festival can be doubted as what is the evidence that the number of people who attended the festival were inhabitants of monroe. The arguer also states that
several well known jazz musicians are residents of monroe but the statement is not clear as whether any of them would be performing at the new jazz club or not. The arguer also tells about the Jazz nightly program which is quite not appealing.
Firstly, the arguer believes that more people of monroe would visit the new jazz club rather than the one located 65 miles away. But there are certain points which are to be considered such as if the musicians of the jazz club located far away are liked more by the people of monroe then the people would visit that jazz club undoubtedly. In addition to that the fact that over 100000 people visited the jazz festival at monroe needs some more profound proof such as whether all the visitors of the festival were from monroe or not, as it is possible that only a few jazz fans from monroe would have attended the festival while the rest of the people are not from monroe.
Secondly, The arguer claims that there are several well known jazz performers residing in monroe, but it is not necessary that these performers would be performing in the new jazz club. So that argument is dubious. On the other hand the arguer also talks about one of the high rated radio program 'jazz nightly'. This fact evidently shows that the people of monroe have a predilection for the jazz music, but it has nothing to do with the opening of the new jazz club in the city so that argument does not appeal to the passage.
Finally, the arguer also talks about the money spend on the jazz music entertainment every year, but that study is nation wide and doesn't not describe anything
about the people of monroe city. Also it is suspicious to think about the nation which the author is talking about.
To epitomize, above described are certain evidences which can be used to evaluate the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2101 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.548 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.267 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.176 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.836 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'discrepancies'?
Suggestion: discrepancies
...ld be profitable. But there are certain discrepancy in the argument. Here the arguer is sta...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 567, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...s and musicians than the new jazz club. Additionally the authors claim about the jazz festiv...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 153, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...necessary that these performers would be performing in the new jazz club. So that...
^^
Line 6, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ld be performing in the new jazz club. So that argument is dubious. On the other hand ...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 116, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
...rtainment every year, but that study is nation wide and doesnt not describe anything about...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 132, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...year, but that study is nation wide and doesnt not describe anything about the people...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 34, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...thing about the people of monroe city. Also it is suspicious to think about the nat...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, in addition, such as, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 460.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66304347826 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32233647258 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.391304347826 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.0993541075 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.176470588 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0588235294 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 5.70786347227 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349975237339 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133262064717 0.0743258471296 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104274408158 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161959056806 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119689785813 0.0628817314937 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.3550499002 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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