An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The representative of international development organization claims that, In order to combat Vitamin A deficiency among the people of Tagus government should do everything in power to promote the production and consumption of millet which is high in Vitamin A without providing any necessary data and evidence to prove its position and conclusion. Representative revels several instances of poor reasoning and fails to mention several key factors that would have helped to evaluate to argument.
The representative readily claims that people of Tagus are deficient on Vitamin A and newly breed millet's are high in Vitamin A without providing necessary evidence to prove this claim. If the millet's are high in Vitamin A than how much percentage is it high compare to non breed millet. Also they haven't mentioned the amount of deficiency people of Tagus have. There could be instance that deficiency is 50 percent while modified millet only reduces the deficiency level by 60 percent or worse 52 percent. If this is the case than promoting the modified millet wont help with the main agenda to overcome deficiency of vitamin a among people.
Furthermore, cost of the seed is not mentioned this could be major factor to evaluate the argument, If the price of newly breed millet were to be too high it wont worth subsiding the farming and invest hefty amount in promoting the consumption and promotion of this new millet instead we can recommend Vitamin A Supplemental medication which is cheap and easily accessible in nearby pharmacy shops.
Finally, Just because millet's are staple in Tagus diet doesn't ensures that the consumption of newly breed millet will be high or people will readily include newly breed millet various factors depends on it and more data is required about millet's like similarity in taste,texture and cost.
In conclusion the representative argument is not concise and haven't provided necessary data.To strengthen the argument he must Provide cost associated with production,how much vitamin a millet have and does if fulfills the dietary requirement
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- An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p 63
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1723 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.068 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.822 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.395 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.448 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.709 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of Tagus are deficient on Vitamin A and newly breed millets are high in Vitamin ...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...necessary evidence to prove this claim. If the millets are high in Vitamin A than ...
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Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gh in Vitamin A than how much percentage is it high compare to non breed millet. ...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...is it high compare to non breed millet. Also they havent mentioned the amount of def...
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Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
... compare to non breed millet. Also they havent mentioned the amount of deficiency peop...
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Line 3, column 511, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...evel by 60 percent or worse 52 percent. If this is the case than promoting the mod...
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Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...genda to overcome deficiency of vitamin a among people. Furthermore, cost of t...
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Line 7, column 35, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ps. Finally, Just because millets are staple in Tagus diet doesnt ensures that...
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Line 7, column 58, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...cause millets are staple in Tagus diet doesnt ensures that the consumption of newly b...
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Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , texture
...d about millets like similarity in taste,texture and cost. In conclusion the represen...
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Line 9, column 34, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ost. In conclusion the representative argument is not concise and havent provi...
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Line 9, column 64, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...esentative argument is not concise and havent provided necessary data.To strengthen t...
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Line 9, column 95, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...cise and havent provided necessary data.To strengthen the argument he must Provide...
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Line 9, column 169, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , how
... Provide cost associated with production,how much vitamin a millet have and does if ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, if, so, then, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 334.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23053892216 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89038790023 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502994011976 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.146546234 57.8364921388 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.7 119.503703932 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413360539644 0.218282227539 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169592943522 0.0743258471296 228% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087494221965 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219825291147 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887500342304 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.3550499002 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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