An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
In this recommendation, it is stated that the new breed of millet should be promoted for farming. The author has come to this conclusion from the facts that this new breed contains high amount of vitamin A and farming of millet will be welcomed as millet is one of staple food in Tagus. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three question must be answered.
First of all, Is there clear evidence that net cost of preparing Vitamin A is less than other contemporary methods? Since it has already been said that in statement that the cost of seed is more, it might be the case that the total cost of producing vitamin A might be several times higher than other standard methods. If this scenario has merit, then conclusion drawn in the original statement is significantly weakened.
Secondly, Is it necessarily true that millet being staple food in Tagus will make it readily acceptable farm? For instance, it might be the case that the soil of village is so unfertile that no other crops grows there except millet. Also it may be possible that the process of cultivating and harvesting millet is far more demanding than its return. Thus, if the above is true, then the argument does not hold water.
In addition, Are we sure of the fact that this new breed doesn't contain some ingredients that have adverse effect in long term? It is possible that this new breed contains a small amount of toxic element detrimental to human health which shows it's effect in long run. If this case happens to be true then the argument is out of the window.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the three questions above and offer more evidence( perhaps in the form of systematic research) then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation of suggesting to grow crops
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1566 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.647 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.592 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.724 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed, three question must be answered. First of all, Is there clear evidence th...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... other crops grows there except millet. Also it may be possible that the process of ...
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Line 7, column 58, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...we sure of the fact that this new breed doesnt contain some ingredients that have adve...
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Line 7, column 269, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lth which shows its effect in long run. If this case happens to be true then the a...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the argument is out of the window. In conclusion, the argument, as it stand...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 336.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79464285714 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66395316608 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517857142857 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3879294645 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.4 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306914319572 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100529425007 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084907059844 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161526559081 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0976354796886 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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