An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
To help the Vitamin A deficient people of Tagus we must understand the situation more closely. Based on the facts of the case it can be argued that the step taken by the government in providing subsidies is in the right direction towards alleviating the condition of the people of Tagus. But we must also account the fact that Tagus is an impoverished nation. People do not earn enough money that they can buy the seeds for this new variety of millet. Though providing subsidy will help in promoting the crop but we need to argue on some unanswered questions
1) Does the cultivation of new variety of millet is almost identical to the old variety. For e.g. does it require the same amount of water, can be grown in same weather, don't require additional inputs?
2) Are these engineered varieties more immune to attacks from pests and rodents? If so then how much pesticides should be given?
3) Has it been tested on the native people of Tagus? Has the research findings must be publicized by the government ?
4) If the farmer switches from the old millet to the new millet will his land be rendered useless by the new engineered variety to grow any other crop and hence will cease to be the will of the farmer?
5) Was there any side-effects manifested during the testing of the crops?
All of these questions are equally important to answer this will allow each stakeholder the proportionate information and importance that one must keep in mind. For e.g. the first question deals with the fact that the farmer may need to change the cultivation habits which incurs additional labor and farming costs. The second question deals with the isstue whether new farming practices are required to be incorporated or not. Such details will allow the farmer to take an informed decision.
Supposedly if the new variety renders the land useless for the growth of any other crop. Then the farmer is forced to grow only the engineered variety. This means that later if the organization providing this new breed decides to increase the money and the government is unable to subsidize the crops then the entire burden will fall on the farmers. The subsidy that the government provides is part of the revenue generated from the people of Tagus. So the gain in health and prosperity of Tagus due to subsidized millet must outweigh the loss due to subsidy. This can be based on a yearly statistics of the health benefits after the introduction of the new variety of crops.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 170, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...of water, can be grown in same weather, dont require additional inputs? 2 Are these...
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Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... from pests and rodents? If so then how much pesticides should be given? 3 Has it b...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'e.g.', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256578947368 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.155701754386 0.15541462614 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0855263157895 0.0836205057962 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0350877192982 0.0520304965353 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0175438596491 0.0272364105082 64% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127192982456 0.125424944231 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0438596491228 0.0416121511921 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56598053657 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0350877192982 0.026700313972 131% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.15350877193 0.113004496875 136% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0394736842105 0.0255425247493 155% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00438596491228 0.0127820249294 34% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2455.0 2731.13054187 90% => OK
No of words: 431.0 446.07635468 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69605568445 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.324825986079 0.378187486979 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.220417633411 0.287650121315 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.155452436195 0.208842608468 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111368909513 0.135150697306 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56598053657 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 207.018472906 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489559164733 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 54.4961094977 52.1807786196 104% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 17.9583333333 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.556911544 57.7814097925 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.291666667 141.986410481 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9583333333 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.416666666667 0.724660767414 57% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.14285714286 156% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 40.0000966744 51.9672348444 77% => OK
Elegance: 2.05263157895 1.8405768891 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383828143561 0.441005458295 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.102782135695 0.135418324435 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0918104975575 0.0829849096947 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.609148754195 0.58762219726 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.21074966687 0.147661913831 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150657381877 0.193483328276 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709361991965 0.0970749176394 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.245375575199 0.42659136922 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.166391836206 0.0774707102158 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214266783289 0.312017818177 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945659941298 0.0698173142475 135% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.82512315271 249% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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