An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the argument, the author stated that an international development organization has taken steps to fight vitamin A deficiency among the people of Tagus. But there are some loop holes about the recommendations, acceptations and supports of the government which are needed to be answered.
First of all, the author said that the international development organization has engineered a new breed of millet which suppose to be high in vitamin A for the people in the improvised nation of Tagus. But there is no scientific data that how improvised the new breed is. There is no comparison given about what percent the new breed is enriched in vitamin A than the previous ones. This makes the author's recommendation doubtful.
Secondly, the author stated that farmers would be paid subsides for farming the new variety of millet as the cost more. But there is no such commitment given from the government. The author made a strong assumption based on a nothing supportive.
Thirdly, the author made another weak assumption that the people of Tagus will surely adopt the new millet as millet is their staple food. The author has no statistical support here. As the Tagus people have no experiment with the new millet it cannot be said strongly that they will adopt it. They may not like the taste of the new one. Additionally, people may not bare the expense of the new millet.
Last of all, the author said government should do anything to combat the vitamin A deficiency. But there is no confirmation from the people of Tagus that they have or will adopt the new type of millet. Therefore, there is no proper reason for the Tagus government to promote the new breed of millet.
In conclusion, it can be said that, quite a number of important questions are needed to answer to support the author's recommendation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: SUPPOSE_TO[1]
Message: Probably you should use a past participle here: 'supposed'.
Suggestion: supposed
... engineered a new breed of millet which suppose to be high in vitamin A for the people ...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... than the previous ones. This makes the authors recommendation doubtful. Secondly, t...
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Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...author has no statistical support here. As the Tagus people have no experiment wit...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ons are needed to answer to support the authors recommendation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 310.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89032258065 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82836090169 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458064516129 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.201310611 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2222222222 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435903041221 0.218282227539 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135495013124 0.0743258471296 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115846768085 0.0701772020484 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213542299084 0.128457276422 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10562822858 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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