A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment.
The Jazz music is popular in the city Monroe and adding a jazz club will be profitable move as a prospect to the business. The author has provided several facts and figures to bolster his argument which concludes the success the of the new club. Though, the underlying issue have merit; because of a lack of relevant evidence, unaddressed assumptions and vague terminology, the author's argument is unsubstantiated and deeply flawed.
The first point is the population of the Monroe city which is prominent factor from the business view. If the number of people are lesser than expected and the new start up will go in vain. Although, Jazz is extremely popular in Monroe but the facts of interested number, are more important than the popularity. Given that the Jazz is popular on the radio program but there can be possibility of popularity of other music type also. Moreover, there is lack of evidence of the popularity scale which make the author's point ambiguous here.
Secondly, Monroe can be considered as a shore city which has less population and city is accessible to the world easily. So, the music festival can be organized to attract the tourism of the country in Monroe and can justify the vast number of people in last annual jazz festival held on last summer. The resources are readily available in the city which has provided it as the identity as a Jazz music capital but, as mentioned the summer season for the festival time; one can assume that the winters are harsh for the city and new club will face downtime, if above two points are considered as true.
The typical Jazz fan expenditure data is also seems skeptical, as the base of it is nationwide. If the Jazz is taken as the most popular music in the nation and there are more happening cities available for the people comparatively Monroe, eventually data will be of no use to study about the new business of club. If the study would have conducted on local people with the population figures, it could have provided more limpid picture.
The conclusion to start the club in the city can have better understanding, if some more factors would have been provided and more clear surveys and studies would have been conducted. The data given in the argument is plausible but still unclear. There are more of cloudy thinking by the author than the realistic views that has collapsed the argument.
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- A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popula 54
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: as well
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Suggestion: summer
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254504504505 0.25644967241 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.153153153153 0.15541462614 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.105855855856 0.0836205057962 127% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0382882882883 0.0520304965353 74% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00900900900901 0.0272364105082 33% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128378378378 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0495495495495 0.0416121511921 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56434761005 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0135135135135 0.026700313972 51% => OK
Particles: 0.00225225225225 0.001811407834 124% => OK
Determiners: 0.128378378378 0.113004496875 114% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0315315315315 0.0255425247493 123% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0135135135135 0.0127820249294 106% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2377.0 2731.13054187 87% => OK
No of words: 411.0 446.07635468 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78345498783 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.304136253041 0.378187486979 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.23600973236 0.287650121315 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165450121655 0.208842608468 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.114355231144 0.135150697306 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56434761005 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 207.018472906 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45498783455 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 48.9465899435 52.1807786196 94% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 24.1764705882 23.2022227129 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4480347119 57.7814097925 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.823529412 141.986410481 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1764705882 23.2022227129 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.529411764706 0.724660767414 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 47.7774438242 51.9672348444 92% => OK
Elegance: 2.15730337079 1.8405768891 117% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.48301574799 0.441005458295 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.175610910979 0.135418324435 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0817500607958 0.0829849096947 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.668633929266 0.58762219726 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0882989239385 0.147661913831 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.248226165158 0.193483328276 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978289138469 0.0970749176394 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.546257034132 0.42659136922 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0238097652151 0.0774707102158 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.375724477282 0.312017818177 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424596586254 0.0698173142475 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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