"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because online instruction takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at Humana University, we should initiate and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni."
In the memorandum from the president, it is stated that Humana University management wants to start and promote online degree programs to improve enrolment numbers and resolve budget deficit problems. The president has arrived at this conclusion from the fact that a nearby university, namely Omni, has increased its enrolment numbers considerably, while simultaneously cutting down on dormitory and classroom space expenses by starting to offer online degree programs. However, before moving forward with the idea of starting these online classes, a few assumptions need to be addressed.
First of all, the president has assumed that the last year’s outcomes at nearby Omni University, can surely be replicated at Humana University this year. In other words, it is assumed that historical data from Omni University can be directly interpreted so as to make predictions and general comparisons with Humana University. It is probable that Omni University and Humana University are similar based on the single fact that they’re in the same neighborhood; perhaps there was an online degree program “hype” which tends to sway the opinion of the masses more than ever these days, due to social media, ultimately causing many students to enroll because of peer pressure. It might also be the case that students opted for the online degree courses due to teachers at Omni University having past expertise in teaching using the internet resources and having a good track record for job placements through the same degrees. If either of these scenarios has merit, the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, it is implicitly assumed that the sole reason for reduced dormitory and classroom space expenditure is due to significant amount of people opting for online degree programs. This blinkered view fails to take into account the possible increase in rent in nearby the campus area, which might’ve caused students to steer towards the online degree path, even the ones who wanted to pursue a traditional, on-campus degree. There might also be a possibility that a pandemic and/or a natural calamity could have occurred during the previous year. This might’ve been beneficial for Omni University’s online degree programs. If even one of the above cases is true, the president’s argument does not hold water.
Lastly, the president is assuming that introducing an online degree program would surely boost the enrollment numbers and solve the problem of budget deficits at Humana University. It would not be wise to think that just introducing an promoting online degree programs won’t come with their caveats. It is very important to have a strong infrastructure for handling all the nuances of online resources, with a capable team adept in technology to look after the hardware and ensure smooth operations, and to protect the information stored in the university online archives from various online attacks. The expenses which come along with introducing an online degree program and promoting it, might end up being much higher than the profits which Humana University would be making. If Humana University wants to initiate online degree programs at the earliest, they should be aware of the pre-requisites for such a venture.
In conclusion, the argument in its current state is significantly flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. Although if the author is able to provide more evidence and answers to the questions above (perhaps through a systematic survey of the nearby area), then it would be viable to clearly evaluate the viability of the recommendation to introduce and promote online degree programs at Humana University.
- Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent During the same year Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space mo 83
- Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent During the same year Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space mo 80
- Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent During the same year Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space mo 83
- Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent During the same year Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space mo 83
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... University can be directly interpreted so as to make predictions and general comparison...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... be wise to think that just introducing an promoting online degree programs won’t ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3140.0 2260.96107784 139% => OK
No of words: 585.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36752136752 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84770112712 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 204.123752495 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504273504274 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 1010.7 705.55239521 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.3391498492 57.8364921388 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.0 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334960963207 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102747134194 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650060556349 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18812463846 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754082073811 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 98.500998004 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... University can be directly interpreted so as to make predictions and general comparison...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... be wise to think that just introducing an promoting online degree programs won’t ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3140.0 2260.96107784 139% => OK
No of words: 585.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36752136752 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84770112712 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 204.123752495 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504273504274 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 1010.7 705.55239521 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.3391498492 57.8364921388 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.0 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334960963207 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102747134194 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650060556349 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18812463846 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754082073811 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 98.500998004 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.