In this article, the author tries to use the data of the students who take education in Omni University and that in Humana University to indicate that online education system is the way to address problems in Humana University. However, before we come to the conclusion, there are some questions need to answer.
Firstly, the author shows that the number of students who take online degree programs increased by 50 percent in Omni University last year. The author wants to imply that the establishment of online education helps Omni University increase its total enrollment and such program will also help Humana University. However, we need to answer the question about whether the total enrollment in Omni University increased or not last year. In the article, the author only shows the increased percentage of online education. If total enrollment in Omni University really increased last year, then such advice may be useful. Otherwise, if the offline enrollment in Omni University decreased more than the increased number of online programs, then the online degree program may not help Humana University improve itself.
Secondly, the author refers that the expenditures for dormitory and classroom decreased from prior years. Although the author tries to prove that the online education takes place the offline instruction and help Omni University save more money, we need to ask if such decrease is caused by the increase of online programs. If the decrease in expenditure is caused by changing the location of dormitory and classroom in other region, or the welfare from government education system, then we can't make sure if the online education will help university save money.
Finally, even if total enrollment increased and more money is saved due to the online education in Omni University, we can't go to the conclusion that such movements will also benefit Humana University. There are many questions need to answer about the differences between two universities. For example, if the Omni University is more favored by students than Humana University, then Humana University may not get the similar increase of enrollment or save money.
In a conclusion, although the author shows some data of Omni University and tries to persuade us that Humana University will solve its problem by creating the online education program, we need to varify the questions above before taking actions.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1980 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.143 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.642 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.877 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.453 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.648 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.199 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...om government education system, then we cant make sure if the online education will ...
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Line 7, column 120, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...online education in Omni University, we cant go to the conclusion that such movement...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26233766234 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72946108864 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387012987013 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7508056702 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.066666667 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362211712007 0.218282227539 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160109310104 0.0743258471296 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120637303192 0.0701772020484 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197013762467 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122982539859 0.0628817314937 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 48.3550499002 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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