The argument is revoluting around a topic; cow flu. Cow flu is a disease which is transmitted by cows to humans. However, the argument is unwarranted and is not bolstered by evidence which supports the argument. The argument is filled with unsubstantiated assumptions and is fallacious.
Firstly, the argument states that many lives could have been saved if the inoculations for cow flu had been routinely administered. This claim is not undergirded by evidence because it fails to provide us with the statistics of how many people actually died of cow flu in the past. Also, many other details such as morbidity rate, mortality rate are missing from the argument. A clear survey needs to be done in order to find out the fatality rate and other similar data which will bolster the argument. The argument also needs to state how effective the inoculations were previously and how many perished even after taking the inoculation
Additionally, the argument claims that the inoculations against cow flu must be routinely administered. However, the argument fails to address that who are these denizens who needs to be administered. Are only shepherds vulnerable to disease--since they are in close contact--or anyone who came in contact with the shepherd? It fails to address how the flue is transmitted. The argument needs to declare that who needs to be in inoculated against cow flu and how the flu spreads.
Most importantly, it fails to address how effective the inoculation is against cow flu. It also fails to address the side effects of the cow flu and what age gamut the inoculations can be taken without making the inoculations pernicious. It is plausible that the inoculations have a negative effect on a person with diabetes and may lead to death. The argument needs to pellucidly state the age gamut the inoculations needs to be taken, mention the side effects and also warn people who are already suffering from a disease.
From the aforementioned points, it is clear that the argument lacks cohesiveness and is filled with unbolstered claims. The argument can further be strengthed by inculcating the heretofore mentioned suggestions.
- Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected However since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations we cannot permi 50
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure 75
- All too often companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees such consultants would be unnecessary 83
- The following is an excerpt from a speech given to the School Board about a change to the curriculum quot Because the future will be dominated by technology we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students If our s 65
- Discussing controversial topics with those with contrasting views is not useful because very few people change their mind when questioned about their core beliefs 75
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g the heretofore mentioned suggestions.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13031161473 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02963875867 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453257790368 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9127809731 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3157894737 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5789473684 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21052631579 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24652162295 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08621484338 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747113643689 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135548492055 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720226594496 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g the heretofore mentioned suggestions.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13031161473 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02963875867 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453257790368 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9127809731 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3157894737 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5789473684 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21052631579 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24652162295 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08621484338 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747113643689 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135548492055 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720226594496 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.