Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
The author of the argument states that administration of inoculations has a small possibility which will result in the death of person. Hence it cannot be used as a remedy for cow flu on a routine basis. While it may be true that administration of inoculations can be fatal but the author doesn't provide a cogent case in order to prevent it from being regularly used. It is easy to understand the author's concern towards the people but his argument is rife with holes and assumptions and thus, does not provide a strong reason to convince a reader inoculations are not safe.
The author's major assumption is that inoculations against cow flu might save many lives. The author himself is not sure whether the inoculation will preclude the spread of the disease or might save the person affected by the malady. He could have mentioned how the inoculation works and how it fights against the illness. There is a possibility that the inoculation doesn't work and the people who were once affected recovered naturally and not because of the medicine.
Additionally, author claims that there is small possibility that a person will die as a result of inoculations. But he has not provided enough evidence to bolster his/her claim. The major question which needs to be answered is: Did the person die because of inoculations? He/she might have expired due to some other illness or some accident. The reason for his/her death remains unknown. The author cannot simply assume that the person died because of inoculation. He/she has to investigate thoroughly before jumping into conclusions. There is a chance that the probability that a person will die after being inoculated is 1 in a million. In that case the claim made by the author seems to be redundant because every person's body is not similar and all the medicines inevitably do have some or the other side effect. It is also possible that the person who died might have been in his final stages when he/she was inoculated.
Another important piece of evidence which is missing is that whether the person who died was administered with the "cow flu" inoculation only or was he inoculated for some other illness. What if the cow flu inoculation is not fatal? It is possible that the cow flu inoculation is very effective and has been successful in eradicating the particular disease completely from the affected area. We cannot generalize the opinion about inoculation without knowing these variables. The author has failed to have considered these facts before drawing the final conclusion.
The litany of unaccounted assumptions made by the author seriously jeopardizes the surmise that inoculations are fatal in general and should not be routinely administered. Although the author is concerned about the health of the public he/she has to explore the extra variables associated with this case carefully and then draw a definitive conclusion.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 2374 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.845 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.786 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.03 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.36 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ich will result in the death of person. Hence it cannot be used as a remedy for cow f...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...noculations can be fatal but the author doesnt provide a cogent case in order to preve...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e is a possibility that the inoculation doesnt work and the people who were once affec...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, thus, while, as to, in general, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2435.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 482.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05186721992 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84630441778 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460580912863 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.5617325168 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.28 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344028278571 0.218282227539 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103881311733 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777339119685 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186904506746 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730200651619 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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