Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels
The author's argument that the business in Central Plaza is steadily decreasing because of the popularity of skateboard is flawed for numerous reasons. In the argument, the author uses vague and assumptious term to demonstrate that only the popularity of skateboarding is responsible to decrease the business in central plaza, whereas there could have no relation between them. Furthermore, there is no statistical data or evidence found regarding the increase or decrease of business in Central Plaza that can convince the readers.
To begin, decreasing the number shoppers may have other reason and could have no relation to the popularity of skateboard. But author claims that increasing popularity of skateboard is responsible for that which does not have proper evidence. Perhaps there could be another promising shopping mall where the shoppers are shifted for better profit. Moreover, it is also possible that the number of customers visiting the mall has been reduced due to their economic crisis, as a result, the shoppers decided to move.
Furthermore, the author does not depict convincing statistics regarding the decrease of shoppers and the increase of skateboarding popularity. Again, there is also no information about the revenue of the shoppers. This could be an important factor to decide whether or not the shoppers have moved for financial reason or not. The dramatic increase of litter and vandalism also infer that the lack of security in that mall which could have been a potential reason for the shoppers to move.
In conclusion, the argument has several basic weak points that cannot be overlooked easily and the conclusion is not enough strong to convince the readers. The argument could have been more strengthened if convincing statistics chart or survey were given. However, as it stands, the argument is flawed for indicated reasons.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the argument, the author uses vague and assumptious term to demonstrate that only the popularity of skateboarding is responsible to decrease the business in central plaza, whereas there could have no relation between them.
Error: assumptious Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 296 350
No. of Characters: 1540 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.148 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.203 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.756 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.599 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.598 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument that the business in Central P...
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Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... could be an important factor to decide whether or not the shoppers have moved for financial r...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, whereas, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 296.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3277027027 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81920969387 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47972972973 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2358480635 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.642857143 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.70786347227 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264485056702 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990442793359 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945191186336 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161646195211 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122913909891 0.0628817314937 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.