The store owners in Central Plaza believe that the decrease in their business is related to the increase in the use of the plaza by skateboard users. Also, they believe that vandalism in the plaza is associated with this sport practice. These arguments should be better evaluated for some reasons.
Firstly, vandalism cannot be associate to skateboard. There could be people practicing this sport without being responsible for the vandalism acts. These acts might be associate by the presence of other groups in Central Plaza. If there is fewer people going to this place, perhaps the plaza might be attracting persons that has the intention to only practice vandalism acts in it. In many cases, public spaces that has not too much movement tends to be a point for this sort of acts. In this context, the relation between skateboarding and vandalism should be better analyzed.
Secondly, the decrease could be an economical issue. In economic crisis, consumers might be afraid to go shopping in these places. If the Central Plaza used to be identified for shops that sells products considered superficial to consumers, then this could result in a depression in the amount of sells made by store owners. In this sense, people will not spend money in products that are not for basic needs.
Finally, interests of the public target might be mistaken by the shop owners. People might get tired about the sorts of things that are in sell at Central Plaza stores. For instance, these stores might be associated within a certain cloth style that are not considered popular anymore. Also, the Central Plaza might have only fast food restaurants while the public is looking for more health options to eat. In this context, someone that goes shopping and like to spend a good amount of time searching for product might get frustrated because there is no interesting food options to eat there. Moreover, if many families like to go for Central Plaza and there is no playground for kids to play or any other distraction to them, then there is a good possibility that families start to look for other places to shop.
Thus, the statements made by the shop owners should be analyzed with better attention. In order to reinforce their arguments they need to consider some elements. It’s important to analyze if there is a real conection between skateboarding and vandalism; it’s important to analyze how good is the financial conditions of people that used to buy there; finally, it should be reviewed the strategies to attract the public for the Central Plaza.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It's important to analyze if there is a real conection between skateboarding and vandalism; it's important to analyze how good is the financial conditions of people that used to buy there; finally, it should be reviewed the strategies to attract the public for the Central Plaza.
Error: conection Suggestion: connection
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- duplicated to argument 2. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
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flaws:
There are some grammatical Errors. like:
public spaces that has not too much movement tends to be...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2072 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.819 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.491 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.321 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for instance, sort of, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97441860465 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56782626883 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462790697674 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.804357656 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2272727273 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187821368217 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695598529907 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103731832305 0.0701772020484 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138915644908 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100941475799 0.0628817314937 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.