"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While it seems to be pausible that probihiting the skateboarding in this plaza could make the bussiness return to high level, it has no concrete evidence to witness the effectiveness of this practice. Although, it is easy to understand that the merchant and customers want a uncluttered working and shopping environment, it is still rife with a myraid of questions which should be addressed before this recommendation is adopted.
Base on the credence concerning that the decrease of costmers of the shops in Central Plaza is caused by the increasement of the skateboard users in the plaze. There are a lot of reason could lead to the business slump. For instance, the entire economic environment might be not as good as before, so that not only the merchants in Central Plaza, other stores and shopping center also meet the same problem that the number of shopper decreased apparently. And there is another possibility is that along with the development online shopping, more and more shoppers choose the emerge way which is more convenient and efficient to purchase for the merchandise what they want to buy intead of get them in real shops. If the author would like to make the argument more convincing, he could do a deep and sweep research about the shopper number of other shopping center which is not influenced by the skateboarding and compare the result with the data of Central Plaze to eliminate these posibilities.
The author mentions that there has also been a dramatic incerese in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. However, some question shoube be answered to substantiate this argument.The Central Plaza is a open area for every one. How can the author make sure that these litter and vandalism are caused by skateboarding users? We are not informed that the exactly evidence shows that the skateboarding users did that. The dramatic increase of skateboards might cause the crowded in the plaze, but the vandalism and litter could because of the incomplete management. It is possible that the office reduced the investment of the repairment and maintainance. The author should address this question by offering the evidence about the skateboarding users behaviors or investigating the investment of the plaza's maintainance.
According to the passage, if it is ture that the business slump and the litter and vandalism are all ascribe to the sketading, will the business must back to the high level after prohibit the skateboarding? Probably not. The number of shoppers already decrease obviously. It means that the costmers have made their decision to abandon shopping in the Central Plaze
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
lost one argument.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 2165 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.811 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.559 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.482 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
While it seems to be pausible that probihiting the skatebo...
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Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nd that the merchant and customers want a uncluttered working and shopping enviro...
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Line 5, column 572, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...shopping, more and more shoppers choose the emerge way which is more convenient and effici...
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Line 9, column 198, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... answered to substantiate this argument.The Central Plaza is a open area for every ...
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Line 9, column 219, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...iate this argument.The Central Plaza is a open area for every one. How can the au...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, so, still, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12037037037 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89688692827 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497685185185 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.5091137022 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.117647059 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4117647059 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239441427699 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758638190686 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068293531244 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13848846672 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059055593031 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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