For the past century, an increase in the number of residential building permits issued per month in a particular region has been a reliable indicator of coming improvements to that region’s economy. If the monthly number of residential building permits issued rises consistently for a few months, the local unemployment rate almost always falls and economic production increases. This well-established connection reveals an effective method by which a regional government can end a local economic downturn: relax regulations governing all construction so that many more building permits can be issued.
In the Argument, the author introduces the increase of permits issued to residential building in the past century as a reliable indicator of economic improvements of the region. Which in turns lead to fall of unemployment in the region and therefore, concludes that the region government should relax the regulations imposed on construction activities to increase the building permits. However, this argument is flawed due to less statistical information provided in the argument about the building permits issued to the residential sector and others. Also the argument fails to address the issues raised due to increase of population in the region.
Firstly, The construction buildings are generally classified into residential, commercial and industrial sectors. Each of these sectors contribute relatively different percentage of margin to the economy of a region. The economic contribution from residential sectors is less when compared to other sectors of construction buildings. Therefore, the authors claim to increase in economy due to residential buildings is inappropriate.
Secondly, As the author claims in reduction of unemployment due to residential buildings is weak as the employment provided by the residential sector doesn’t generate enough revenue to increase economic growth .
Further, if as concluded by the author increase in issuing the permits for buildings by relaxing regulations on construction there are many chances of construction accidents, traffic management and environmental pollution are high. Which in turn effect the economy of the regions.
As the author fails to address the above issues the argument is not sound or persuasive.To strengthen the argument the author may consider the increase of residential and commercial buildings to increase the economy of the region. If the above mentioned items are included in the argument the can produce a strong conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 288 350
No. of Characters: 1591 1500
No. of Different Words: 133 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.12 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.524 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.13 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.986 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.67 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 554, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...d to the residential sector and others. Also the argument fails to address the issue...
^^^^
Line 9, column 215, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ough revenue to increase economic growth . Further, if as concluded by the au...
^^
Line 13, column 233, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t and environmental pollution are high. Which in turn effect the economy of the regio...
^^^^^
Line 17, column 89, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...the argument is not sound or persuasive.To strengthen the argument the author may ...
^^
Line 17, column 232, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to increase the economy of the region. If the above mentioned items are included...
^^
Line 17, column 260, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the region. If the above mentioned items are included in the argument the can pro...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 28.8173652695 10% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 286.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75874125874 5.12650576532 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23081263384 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461538461538 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.872945133 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.692307692 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312080392948 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12325593913 0.0743258471296 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103943820361 0.0701772020484 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176728004552 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812018075148 0.0628817314937 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.3550499002 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.5979740519 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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