Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
The argument claims that the madagascan shrimp population has seen a significant reduction due to the incursions by the deep-sea fishermen and the population should rnot reach the levels before the fishing boats arrival. stating this way the agrument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which the argument could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on the assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is weak, unconvincing and have several flaws.
First, the argument readily claims that incursions by deep-sea fishermen in the habitat of the madagascan shrimp have lead to the reduction in the population of the species. this claim is a stretch and is not substantiated in any way. there are numerous examples in other areas. For example, the incursion of the hunters in the bengal region did not lead to the reduction in the population of bengal tigers, which is very predominant in the area of West bengal, India. rather the reason for fall in the population of the bengal tigers is due to the deforestration which is concluded by researching on the environments of that habitat. In fact, in our case there can be high chances of reduction in population of Madagarcar due to the deleterious affects of the oil spillings whcih is the most popular scenario in the reduction of ocean species. The argument would have been much more clear if it is explicitly stateing provinding necessary facts.
Second, the argument assumes that the population of the Madagarscar shrimps should not rise to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. this again is a very waek and unconvincing as it is not provided by the necessary evidences. without provinding the correlation between the optimal rise in the levels of the species and the time of arrival of boats, the argument remianed unclear. The argument could be further strengthened if it provides the correlation.
Finally, the argument is concluded by saying that if the trend of incursion of fishermen continues then the madagascar shrimp will become an endangered species. "What are the other contributing factors such as enviromental on the madagascan shrimp population?", "How is the correlation between the shrimp optimal population affect the time of incursion of deep-sea fishermen?" without convincing answers to these questions, thae argument remains more of a wishful thinking rather than a substantive one.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons. The argument can be further strengthened by providing necessary evidences and examples. it is better to know all the contributing factors, in order to assess the merits of a particular situation. without this information the argument remains unsubstantiated.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2264 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.122 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.937 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.49 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.417 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.655 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Stating
...evels before the fishing boats arrival. stating this way the agrument fails to mention ...
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Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ction in the population of the species. this claim is a stretch and is not substanti...
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Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ch and is not substantiated in any way. there are numerous examples in other areas. F...
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Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Rather
...nant in the area of West bengal, India. rather the reason for fall in the population o...
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Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: rather,
...nant in the area of West bengal, India. rather the reason for fall in the population o...
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Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...evels before the fishing boats arrived. this again is a very waek and unconvincing a...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...ot provided by the necessary evidences. without provinding the correlation between the ...
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Line 9, column 160, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...iding necessary evidences and examples. it is better to know all the contributing ...
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Line 9, column 268, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...s the merits of a particular situation. without this information the argument remains u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 37.0 16.3942115768 226% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30090497738 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09468935916 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443438914027 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.4771916582 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.571428571 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172392882655 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495649704325 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800479427058 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982836115759 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608746002385 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.