A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The speaker asserts an argument that the regular dental care is not helpful based on an assumption that the children in Himalayan mountain are having less tooth decay despite of their low concerns of their teeth than the children living in suburban. I take exception on the assumption for a number of reasons.
First of all, generally hilly region contain less population than the lower region. The study showing less children of himalaya having less tooth decay turns to be obvious as there are less number of victims than the suburban area. This study does not show the percentage of tooth decay victims of mountain region properly and leaves much ambiguities.
Secondly, even if the population of mountain and suburban area is the same, people of mountain are not that much cautious about their teeth as the people of suburban. This assumption is much credible the study shows that suburban people see dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. But there is no clear evidence of the teeth check up of the people of mountain.
Thirdly, there are myriad of factors varying between the mountain and lower suburban area regarding, climate, weather, lifestyle of people and so forth. There is a possibility that the tooth caring practices of the people of these two areas are different. Tooth decay greatly depends on the type of food intaking. There is a possibility that children of mountain take very little sweet food like chocolate, candies etc. than the children of suburban as there are many super shop of chocolate and candies available here. So it is really, even more imperative to take regular dental check up for children of suburbans.
In conclusion, regular dental checking is not avoidable only because of assumptions based on the vague comparable study of himalayan children teeth care and the suburban teeth care. To bring more strong credence for this argument, there should be more robust study regarding this.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1576 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.894 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.402 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.617 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an argument that the regular dental care is not helpful based on an assumption th...
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Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun children is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...han the lower region. The study showing less children of himalaya having less tooth ...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... of mountain region properly and leaves much ambiguities. Secondly, even if the p...
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Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sibility that the tooth caring practices of the people of these two areas are dif...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.9520958084 8% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 322.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0248447205 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48085917435 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472049689441 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2543715636 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.125 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366704628091 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112693863365 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686606084433 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197762013319 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601413717394 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.