"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertisin

The argument makes several unstaded assumptions regarding the association between the number of sleeping hours of executives and the probality of the business to prosper. Taken as a whole, these weaken assumptions, that will be shown in the following paragraphs, seriously undermine the argument's validity.

First of all, the argument assumes that the performance of the the Mentian advertising executives is the only factor explaining the success of their firms. However, it is very ease to enumerate a number of other key factors counting for a business prosperity, like the engagement of the entire workforce to perfom better, the product diferentiation strategy, the level of competition in the market as well as the overall economy status. Therefore, the mentioned association may be a spurious relationship created by a flawed statistical approach, since there is no evidence in the argument showing that other important factors more than the sleeping hours of the firm's advertising executives were also controled in the mentioned study.

More significantly, there is no evidence proven that the association found between the executive's sleeping hours and the business perfomance is a cause-effect relationship. The fact that the mentioned study has demonstrated association between the two variables do not necessarily assure that hiring people that need to sleep less than 6 hours per night would make a business more likely to prosper.

Finally, there is no evidences in the argument assuring that a massive and statistically valid sample of executives were surveyed in the study. It is possible that the study was made with executives of only a certain type of business, like finance or banking, for example, what makes the study not valid for all kinds of business.

To sum up, the argument holds its basis in a number of flawed assumptions. For that reason, it contribute to give incomplete insights to the business magazine readers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...ing paragraphs, seriously undermine the arguments validity. First of all, the argument...
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Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...rgument assumes that the performance of the the Mentian advertising executives is the o...
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Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...rgument assumes that the performance of the the Mentian advertising executives is the o...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no evidences'?
Suggestion: there are no evidences
...ess more likely to prosper. Finally, there is no evidences in the argument assuring that a massive...
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Line 9, column 96, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'contributes'?
Suggestion: contributes
...flawed assumptions. For that reason, it contribute to give incomplete insights to the busi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, for example, as well as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 308.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36363636364 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04474834666 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529220779221 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.7564959541 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.181818182 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3636363636 5.70786347227 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260970535792 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986365955243 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817619611971 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132949960791 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750799136614 0.0628817314937 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Sentence: The argument makes several unstaded assumptions regarding the association between the number of sleeping hours of executives and the probality of the business to prosper.
Error: probality Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: unstaded Suggestion: united

Sentence: However, it is very ease to enumerate a number of other key factors counting for a business prosperity, like the engagement of the entire workforce to perfom better, the product diferentiation strategy, the level of competition in the market as well as the overall economy status.
Error: perfom Suggestion: perform
Error: workforce Suggestion: workhorse
Error: diferentiation Suggestion: differentiation

Sentence: Therefore, the mentioned association may be a spurious relationship created by a flawed statistical approach, since there is no evidence in the argument showing that other important factors more than the sleeping hours of the firm's advertising executives were also controled in the mentioned study.
Error: controled Suggestion: controlled

Sentence: More significantly, there is no evidence proven that the association found between the executive's sleeping hours and the business perfomance is a cause-effect relationship.
Error: perfomance Suggestion: performance
Error: cause-effect Suggestion: cause effect

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argument 1 -- OK

argument 2 -- OK

argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1609 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.224 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.975 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.72 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.704 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5