The author tries to establish a relationship between productivity and sleep time. By using a research that indicates an association between higher profits with less amount of sleep, the author suggests that in any field individuals who sleep less will deliver more results. Such correlation cannot be made with the given evidence only.
Firstly, since the vast majority of employees cannot work more than 12 hours per day according to current labor laws, there is enough time for employees sleep as much as they need during their leisure time, which does not count as working time. Consequently, it can't be claimed that it will decrease productivity. Moreover, many scientific studies point out that cognitive capabilities in humans achieve their best levels when they sleep between 7 to 8 hours per day. If such studies are valid, then the argument becomes seriously flawed.
In addition to that, the interview responses may not be reliable at all. Generally speaking, CEOs are worried about their image and the way they are seen by others. When a CEO assumes a 9-hour-per-day sleep routine, he or she can contradict the image of hard-working team players they fight to build throughout their careers. Thus, most of them would feel inclined to make a false declaration. Finally, the data collected refers to only one specific niche, namely marketing. Even the study results are indeed veracious, there are no guarantees that this rule can be successfully applied to other niches, fields or occupational levels as well. For example, a truck driver who transports gasoline in an eighteen-wheeler may cause a deadly accident if he or she falls asleep on the steering wheel.
To summarize, the article fails to draw a conclusion with solid data. Not only it tries to establish an absurd relationship based on a research done upon an inaccurate method, but it also tries to make a vast and dangerous generalization.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 316 350
No. of Characters: 1561 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.216 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.94 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.757 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.653 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...n productivity and sleep time. By using a research that indicates an association between h...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...count as working time. Consequently, it cant be claimed that it will decrease produc...
^^^^
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...count as working time. Consequently, it cant be claimed that it will decrease produc...
^^^^
Line 5, column 796, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...she falls asleep on the steering wheel. To summarize, the article fails to draw ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09841269841 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86625355177 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653968253968 0.468620217663 140% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.2807818663 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.375 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208901658491 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531873146842 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587309330679 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113288782791 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552768558127 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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