The author of the argument conculdes that the Bukingham university should build a numeber of new dormitories in the university in order to attract more students in future. To support the argument the author points out increse of living expance in off-campus living and growing enrollment of students in the university. However, the author makes a number of unproved assumptions and the weak survey that hamper a reader's ability to believe the author's conclusion.
If the author were to provide more suppot for his ufounded assumption and better define, some of his terms, the argument would be more compelling.
Firstly, the author assumes the students enrollement will double after 50 years. However, the author does not provide any data of past years showing rate of increse or decrese of enrollment. Though current trend shows high rate of enrollment it can change after some years. The 50 years time is too long to predict any changes in enrollment accurately.
Secondly, the author assumes buliding more dormitories will attract more student in future to enroll in the university. Since the author fails to reveal any conection between increse in dormitories and rate of enrollment this argument seems unsupported. Moreover, in reputed universities the off-campus living exapanse is negligibe compared to the university tution fee. The factor, living exapse would be at last for any student while selecting a university for higher studies. Most of the students prepsre list of universities they would wish to study will be base on the quality of professors, research funding and opportunities the university can provide.
Finally, the author poits out increse of off-campuse living expance in the town where the university is located. It may possible that in near by town rent of apartment may not increase that considerably. In addition, the autor does not mention numerical data showing anount of rent increase in the town where the university is ocated. If the increse in rent is still lesser compared to on-campus living expanse then no student will prefer to live in the unicersity dorms.
In a nutshell, the author does not give his reader a well supported argument. The argument contains a large number of assumptions, that are not properly validated.Because of this the argument remains unconcincing.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 373 350
No. of Characters: 1906 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.395 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.11 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.632 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.715 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...rsity in order to attract more students in future. To support the argument the author poi...
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Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'readers'' or 'reader's'?
Suggestion: readers'; reader's
...tions and the weak survey that hamper a readers ability to believe the authors conclusi...
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Line 1, column 444, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...hamper a readers ability to believe the authors conclusion. If the author were to prov...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the argument would be more compelling. Firstly, the author assumes the students...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... any changes in enrollment accurately. Secondly, the author assumes buliding mo...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ortunities the university can provide. Finally, the author poits out increse of...
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...ity is located. It may possible that in near by town rent of apartment may not increase...
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Line 5, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...derably. In addition, the autor does not mention numerical data showing anount of...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he town where the university is ocated. If the increse in rent is still lesser com...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...refer to live in the unicersity dorms. In a nutshell, the author does not give ...
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Line 6, column 102, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...pported argument. The argument contains a large number of assumptions, that are not properly vali...
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Line 6, column 165, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Because
...ptions, that are not properly validated.Because of this the argument remains unconcinci...
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Line 6, column 165, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ptions, that are not properly validated.Because of this the argument remains unconcinci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23387096774 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87043786137 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486559139785 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.713218376 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.473684211 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0961543090057 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361384988979 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424867943308 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0496088066511 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445631796242 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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