Slimville city residents have adopted healthier life styles. A survey shows that their exercises habits conform more closely what doctors recommend than they did seven years ago.More people have been taking daily walks than ever before. Although a few gyms have been closed down, other receive full attendances in some seasons. Because of these positives changes in the exercising habits of the city, we predict that the obesity rate of the city will be soon be below the national average.
The author of the above statements has taken unjust conclusion based on irrelevant and obscure details provided. The conclusion is drawn that the Slimville city will soon have the obesity rate lesser than the national average of the country only based on the fact that people of Slimville have adopted new healthier habits than before is quite disturbing.
There is no information about the national average and former obesity rate of the city if the national average of the country is very less and people in Slimville in olden time use to be highly obese than there is no chance this can happen over a small period of seven years. Along with is the fact that only going for a walk once in a day can not cure obesity, we really need to take care of the eating habits i.e., taking a healthy breakfast, lunch and a light dinner is also an important factor and there is no mention about the daily eating habits of the people in the city.
Moreover, it is mentioned a few gyms were closed down in the recent past, the reason can be because people didn't tend to go and exercise in gyms and now the whole pressure has turned to the fewer gyms left and hence the leftover few gyms received full attendance. Also, it is very obscure what is meant by the term full attendance, because if only a very few people have registered in the gym then obesity of the whole city can't be cured and the average of the city can't go down.
Adding to the point the mention of people adapting healthy habits now is also not given, if people who are already below the obesity average work out and keep himself fit then the obesity rate will have a minimal impact and thus will not be changed significantly. So obese people in the city didn't work out, go for walk or adapt healthy habits then there is no such chance that rate will have a significant depreciate.
Therefore drawing out such a big conclusion based on such nominal information is not justified and we need to look into many significant details before which we can comment about the surpassing of the national average.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: didn't
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5320855615 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32140540323 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46256684492 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 41.0 22.8473053892 179% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2760264847 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 188.333333333 119.503703932 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.5555555556 23.324526521 178% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214452673374 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940518789295 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071333433251 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114865689054 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668082158383 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 14.3799401198 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.32 48.3550499002 79% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.197005988 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 12.5979740519 78% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 11.1389221557 165% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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