SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
While the argument may insist that SuperCorp's decision to move from Middlesburg to Corporateville is a superior decision, the argument falls short due to the lack of detail provided in its assumptions. The argument fails to provide evidence and support to back its assumptions on why Supercorp's move to Corporateville was an ideal decision.
To start, the argument states that one of the reasons why Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg is because of the recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville. The argument does not explicitly state as to why the recent surge of homeowners helps SuperCorp's allocation, but one can assume that the argument is trying to show how a higher number of people might help SuperCorp's sales. However, this is a faulty assumption to make because an increase in sales depends on many factors such as the quality of a product a company is selling and whether there is competiton in the area. SuperCorp may specialize in selling computers but if there is already another company in Corporateville that is known for selling computers and has a great reputation with the community, SuperCorp might actually end up having diminishing sales.
Additionally, the argument talks about how an employee survey shows that SuperCorp workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. The argument does not give any details about this survey, such as how many employees were interviewed and how significant is the percentage gap between those who prefer nonurban areas over those who do. If the percentage difference only differs by 1 or 2%, the survey does not really provide any substantial information. Also, if SuperCorp has 100 employees and the survey only interviewed 10 or 20, this makes the survey inaccurate and skewed because it does not show most of the employees’ opinion, just a select few. Therefore, by employing the support of a survey with no further information of said survey, the argument starts to weaken.
Lastly, the argument mentions how Corporateville’s lower taxes makes it a safer and cheaper place to work than Middlesburg. This line of thought is hugely flawed because when a community pays taxes, those tax dollars are usually then spent back on the community by funding schools, streets, community spaces, and even police stations. This ultimately shows how although lower taxes might equal a cheaper place to live, that does not always mean it is safer, meaning SuperCorp's move to Corporateville from Middlesburg might even be a risk to safety precautions. Furthermore, although Corporateville might be cheaper, it might not have the same amenities that Middlesburg may provide due to more tax dollars collected.
On the surface, the argument on SuperCorp's move to Corporateville being a superior move may seem sound but on a deeper reading, one can see how the argument's assumptions are superficial. The argument lacks factual evidence and fails to explain in detail exactly why SuperCorp will benefit more in Corporateville than Middlesburg.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 494 350
No. of Characters: 2498 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.714 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.057 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.983 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.025 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.615 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, really, so, then, therefore, while, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2560.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 494.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18218623482 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09855490013 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467611336032 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.5277485645 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.588235294 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0588235294 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284060804166 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106731836054 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100886015862 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178224100965 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864465969915 0.0628817314937 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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