The author argues that all the clients should invest in Techcorporation because it is the first company, in ten years, that develops satellite technology which has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. Moreover, he states that a recent consumer survey depicted that over eighty percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current provider of satellite television and they would switch to a new provider, if given the opportunity to do so. He serves this as the basis of his conclusion that the new venture of Techcorporation into the satellite television segment will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now. However, the author inadvertently skips a few questions that might need further clarification to decide the potential of such argument.
First, the survey stated here corresponds to eighty percent of the respondents. What it does not specifically state that whether these eightly percent is a significant portion of the people using satellite television. There might be a larger proportion of people who did not respond to the survey and skipped it. However, in only accounting for eighty percent of the people who responded the survey, the author might be erroneous in asserting that most people are likely to go for a change in their satellite television service provider. Also how this eighty percent stands in actual numbers is important. For example, if the number of repondents are only a meagre hundred, then eighty people want to change their provider, but if the number of respondents, let's say, is thousand, then their are eight hundred people likely to go for a change, a factor of ten times. This serves to show how the sales will directly be affected by this absolute number of people involved and hence the profitability of Techcorporation and its investors.
Second, the author's statement that this is the first time in ten years that a company which develops satellite technolgy, has been approved by the FTA, serves to be cautionary to its investors. The question relevant to this is why was this certain company approved by the FTA? It might be that over the last ten years, no other company which develops satellite technology, has ever tried to come with customer service ventures due to lack of profitability or associated infrastructural development costs. It is important then, to show how Techcorporation is ready to withstand such challenges that might have discouraged other companies to follow the same course of action. It might also be that Techcorporation has certain acquaintances in the FTA, which has evidently led to this approval. Under such scenario the credibility of its profitability also stands questionable. Furthermore, how a new player in the field provides better facilities at better costs to the customers also needs to be clarified to advocate the profitability of the company in delivering satellite television services to the customers.
Furthermore, other questions relevant to this argument is how the profitability of the company stands over a long time period? While any new entities coming into the market are likely to have an initial support, its services over long time periods are instrumental in ascertaining the profitability of the company. Early investors may see a sudden rise in profits over one day, only to be disappointed in the long run where they are hit by a significant loss due to unforeseen circumstances. Some of these unforeseen circumstances may be that the competing company revises its plans and charges and makes an offering to its existent customers at a lower cost. There might also be additional ventures of other companies in to this market segment. It might also be important that the FTA has revised its standards and are more likely to grant approval to newer companies and under all these scenarios, the question that need to be answered is hoe Techcorporation's providings stand out amidst competition. This will serve to be important in ascertaining the profitability of the investments made.
In conclusion, it might be that the prospect of investing in Techcorporation is profitable for the investors. However, as it stands now, the author's argument stands specious and unpersuasive due to certain unanswered questions. The author must present more clarification on how the eightly percent of the recent survey's respondents correspond to the greater percentage and to a sufficiently large number of people. He must also present clarifications on why Techcorporation was granted the FTA approval, despite history suggesting otherwise and how the company stands profitable in the long run, amdist competition, in order to ensure a fair evaluation of the argument.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 538, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... satellite television service provider. Also how this eighty percent stands in actua...
^^^^
Line 2, column 771, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...the number of respondents, lets say, is thousand, then their are eight hundred people li...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 786, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...espondents, lets say, is thousand, then their are eight hundred people likely to go f...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...oration and its investors. Second, the authors statement that this is the first time i...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 674, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...es to follow the same course of action. It might also be that Techcorporation has ...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... television services to the customers. Furthermore, other questions relevant to this argum...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...vestors. However, as it stands now, the authors argument stands specious and unpersuasi...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.6327345309 194% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 28.8173652695 198% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 107.0 55.5748502994 193% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3966.0 2260.96107784 175% => OK
No of words: 761.0 441.139720559 173% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21156373193 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.25225936605 4.56307096286 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13285294147 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 321.0 204.123752495 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421813403417 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1258.2 705.55239521 178% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5536076211 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.75862069 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2413793103 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03448275862 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.20758483034 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284647788759 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871190286485 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853517308569 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174809510631 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836115018223 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 165.0 98.500998004 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 538, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... satellite television service provider. Also how this eighty percent stands in actua...
^^^^
Line 2, column 771, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...the number of respondents, lets say, is thousand, then their are eight hundred people li...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 786, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...espondents, lets say, is thousand, then their are eight hundred people likely to go f...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...oration and its investors. Second, the authors statement that this is the first time i...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 674, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...es to follow the same course of action. It might also be that Techcorporation has ...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... television services to the customers. Furthermore, other questions relevant to this argum...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...vestors. However, as it stands now, the authors argument stands specious and unpersuasi...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.6327345309 194% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 28.8173652695 198% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 107.0 55.5748502994 193% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3966.0 2260.96107784 175% => OK
No of words: 761.0 441.139720559 173% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21156373193 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.25225936605 4.56307096286 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13285294147 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 321.0 204.123752495 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421813403417 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1258.2 705.55239521 178% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5536076211 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.75862069 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2413793103 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03448275862 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.20758483034 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284647788759 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871190286485 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853517308569 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174809510631 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836115018223 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 165.0 98.500998004 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.