"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Here the author mentioned that more than 40,000 young players who participated in the youth-league sports suffered injuries. However, the author has not mentioned the total number of young players who participated and also the extent of these injuries is not mentioned. There may be a possibilty that figure mentioned might be a small percentage of total youth participation. Perhaps, minor injuries while playing might not be worth considering.
Secondly , the author is trying to highlight the psychological pressure experienced by young players in several major cities from a recent study. However, the sample space of the study is not mentioned. A study of small group of players from a few major cities might not be considered true for entire participation of youth-league players. Additionally, the extent of adversity of psycological pressure is also not clearly mentioned. It is not always necessary that the psycological pressure the author is mentioning about will have a negative impact on the young players. There is a possibility that the pressure given to these young players by their coaches or parents might push them to perform efficiently.
Then the author is quoting the views of several educational experts. According to the experts, the time assigned to the long practice sessions can be used for academic advantages. It is true that the practice sessions might be time consuming in many cases, however one cannot consider it them as unimportant. The practice sessions help young players in improvising their physical fitness as well as their athletic abilities. Perhaps one cannot consider the time utilized by young players for practice as a disadvantage. Also, by reducing the time allocated for practice sessions, one cannot conclude that that time will solely (be) used for the academic activities.
The author is further trying to highlight that the participation in the youth-league sports is a disadvantage for young players and is proposing to discontinue such activities in the Parkville for children under nine. However, discontinuing the youth-league sports might not convert those assumed disadvantages into advantages. Furthermore, as mentioned above, discontinuing athletic activities might make children under nine more prone to the injuries and also, there is no guarantee of their better academic performance. Thereupon, the author's suggestion of discontinuing athletic activities might not be a feasible solution.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 2037 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.389 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.008 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.172 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.339 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 4, column 538, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...er academic performance. Thereupon, the authors suggestion of discontinuing athletic ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, as well as, in many cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49735449735 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10680385812 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44708994709 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1149248983 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.9 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303053934865 0.218282227539 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096323887903 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101749291794 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191718332768 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708908424291 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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