twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author’s claim says that Dr. Field observation centered approach conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and author’s interviewed centered method will establish a much more accurate understanding of child rearing traditions in Tertia island and in other island cultures. This is said so because Dr. Field observation centered approach conclusion and his interviewed centered method conclusion contradicts each other. The claim might not be true because of the explanations given in the following paragraphs.
Initially, author’s team of graduate students might have interviewed few children rather than interviewing all children in Tertia island. And only those few may have spend their time talking about their own biological parents than about other adults in the village. Hence the results that show the children are reared by their own biological parents is not necessarily true.
Secondly, by keeping one island as an example we cannot firmly conclude that it is also applicable to all other island cultures. We need more information and evidences to strengthen author’s claim about understanding of child-rearing traditions. Due to the lack of evidences, the author’s claims fails.
Finally, Dr. Field’s conclusion by observation centered approach was performed twenty years ago and author’s interviewed centered method studies were recent. There is also a chance that in the gap twenty years the previous culture might have evolved into new culture. Hence the claim stating that Dr. Field observation centered approach conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid might not be true.
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Comments
e-rater score report
No. of Words: 244 350
Minimum 250 words wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 244 350
No. of Characters: 1350 1500
No. of Different Words: 124 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.952 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.533 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.781 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.099 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.402 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.635 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little may'.
Suggestion: little may
...ildren in Tertia island. And only those few may have spend their time talking about the...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...tia island. And only those few may have spend their time talking about their own biol...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...than about other adults in the village. Hence the results that show the children are ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 269, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...re might have evolved into new culture. Hence the claim stating that Dr. Field observ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, may, second, secondly, so, then, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 55.5748502994 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1392.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 244.0 441.139720559 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70491803279 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89224653679 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6878840046 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32620649814 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112686457096 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970932452325 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184883439936 0.128457276422 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933237979461 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.78 12.5979740519 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 98.500998004 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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