According to the author, in the last two years, many people who work in the neighborhood Central Plaza noticed a significant decrease of customers associated with a big increase of vandalism and littering in the plaza. This problems, as the argument shows, must be related with the increase of skateboard users in the area. At first glance this theory could appear reasonable but, if we took a deeper look at the situation, we can easily see how the argument flaws in many ways.
First of all the author states a strong connection between the decrease of shoppers number in the plaza and the increase of skateboard users in that same place. Even considered that there might be a sort of relation between this two factors, is more than reasonable to think that this can’t be the only cause. The decrease of customers in the area could be caused by deeper reason. It’s easy to believe, for example, that an economic crisis is a more reasonable cause that brings to that consequence. rising of the amount of skateboarding can not be the only reason of many problems in central plaza, and that is the first point where the argument leaks.
moreover the author present another problem that people noticed in central plaza, the increase in the amount of litter and vandalism. This two problems, even if they might seem somehow related, are actually to discuss briefly in separate ways. for what concerns the increase of littering there must be a more serious cause for the problem, let’s consider for example a change in the number of trash bins inside the plaza; the argument doesn’t consider this possibility that is actually a really important aspect to consider. The same consideration must be done for the vandalism problem. As anyone analyzed or noticed any changes regarding public security for example? An decrease of the presence of police and security would be a much better reason for the rise of vandalism in the area than the increase of skateboarding activities.
Last but not least the argument propose to prohibit any kind of skateboarding activities as a solution for the problems in the plaza. The argument is weaken at its very end too because there are no serious proves of the positive effects that might occur. If we want to make predictions about that, in fact, we need to create a better evaluation of the whole situation and consider many more factors that might influence the results.
In conclusion we can state that the assumption that the author made are extremely weak because there is not a obvious relation between increase of skateboard users in the area and the new problems that central plaza is facing.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
possibly a wrong essay topic. or if the essay topic is this one:
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
the last argument is not correct.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: ??? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2143 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.741 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.554 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.818 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the neighborhood Central Plaza noticed a significant decrease of customers associ...
^^
Line 2, column 221, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...f vandalism and littering in the plaza. This problems, as the argument shows, must b...
^^^^
Line 4, column 512, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Rising
... cause that brings to that consequence. rising of the amount of skateboarding can not ...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...irst point where the argument leaks. moreover the author present another problem that...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: moreover,
...irst point where the argument leaks. moreover the author present another problem that...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 245, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ly to discuss briefly in separate ways. for what concerns the increase of littering...
^^^
Line 6, column 479, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t doesn't consider this possibility that is actually a really important aspe...
^^
Line 6, column 681, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'A' instead of 'An' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: A
... regarding public security for example? An decrease of the presence of police and ...
^^
Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
...problems in the plaza. The argument is weaken at its very end too because there are n...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 73, Rule ID: PROVE_PROOF[2]
Message: Did you mean 'proofs' (noun) instead of proves (verb)?
Suggestion: proofs
...ry end too because there are no serious proves of the positive effects that might occu...
^^^^^^
Line 11, column 109, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...are extremely weak because there is not a obvious relation between increase of sk...
^
Line 11, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...skateboard users in the area and the new problems that central plaza is facing.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, briefly, but, first, if, look, moreover, really, regarding, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91796008869 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65695589986 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450110864745 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9295191389 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.222222222 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0555555556 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207135253186 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734167294867 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546739450923 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119061600126 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559857479882 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.