The Board of director of Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, recommended to discontinue the children’s book section and open the café to attract new customer and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café. They reached to this conclusion based on the recent national censes that indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. However, in order to evaluate the recommendation, three questions must be answered.
Firstly, how many people likely to visit in café? How many students under age ten will discontinue to visit? These questions should be answered to evaluate the recommendation. If number of students who discontinued to visit monarch’s book store is more than number of new attracted customer, then it will have negative impact on the Monarch’s Book store. So, these question must be answered to evaluate the recommendation.
Secondly, is there will be any negative effect on the existing customer due to opening of café in Monarch’s Book store? Suppose if the existing customer come to the monarch book store because it is peaceful and calm place, then it might reduce the footfall of customer after opening of café, which might make monarch café more noisy. Therefore this question also need to be answered to evaluate the recommendation. If café does not create noise, then cafe might be beneficial for the book store. Otherwise, it will have adverse effect on the business.
Thirdly, Is the Regal book store and Monarch book store are comparable? Is Regal Book store has large customer base as Monarch? Is Regal Book store has wide variety of books on all subject? If the answers to these questions is no, then there will be no need to compete with Regal book store. Further, is location and business capturing area of the Regional book store is common? All these questions need to be answer to evaluate.
In conclusion, the recommendation is likely to have the predictable result, If the board of directors or Monarch book store have answer to above mentioned questions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1702 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.891 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.229 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.358 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended discontinuing'.
Suggestion: recommended discontinuing
...me location for more than twenty years, recommended to discontinue the children's book section and op...
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Line 2, column 433, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nswered to evaluate the recommendation. Secondly, is there will be any negative ...
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Line 3, column 340, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ich might make monarch café more noisy. Therefore this question also need to be answered ...
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Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'answered'.
Suggestion: answered
...of directors or Monarch book store have answer to above mentioned questions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 348.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10632183908 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87623295522 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477011494253 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 62.6696696975 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.85 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408149557251 0.218282227539 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127041158133 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127591276368 0.0701772020484 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235559625215 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791497694854 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.