Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. According to the Leeville Chamber of Commerce, these facts can be attributed to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of life in Leeville.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In the argument, author concludes that, the sickness and stress-related illness is lesser in Leeville than in Masonton due to relaxed pace of life in Leeville. This, he implies based on the number of sick days workers take and the diagnosis of stress-related illeness. However, author doesn't take into account following possibilities that could seriously account for the facts on which he bases his conclusion.
Firstly, the argument states that, the workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick leaves than those from Large city of Masonton. Based on which, he implies that people from Leeville must be physically fit than from those from Masonton. However, it could be possible that, the people in Leeville are not being allowed to take too many sick leaves and that they're being forced to work even in their illness sometimes. Furthermore, workers from the large city of Masonton could be taking undue advantage of sick leaves, taking sick leaves at even little discomfort. If any of these two explanations are true, then it could seriously weaken the argument that people from Leeville are physically fit than those from Masonton.
Further, it states that, diagnosis of stress related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. It could be possible that, most of the people suffering from stress-related illness are not aware about it and hence, not getting professional help. Whereas, all the people from Masonton, who even face minor stress realted illness must be worried and visiting Doctors. So, it's possible that, people from Leeville are suffering from stress-related illness proportionally higher than those from Masonton. But due to improper data, it might be telling otherwise.
At the end, author attributes the conclusion to relaxed pace of life in Leeville. This author could be implying just because Leeville is a small town. However, due to lack of proper facilities, life in small towns can be stressful as well.
Hence, author should take other possibilities for the stated facts in account before making a conclusion. This conclusion could otherwise be flawed and can't be held to be truthful.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1757 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.02 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.657 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.669 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.371 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 286, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...tress-related illeness. However, author doesnt take into account following possibiliti...
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Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the argument states that, the workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer si...
^^
Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...d to take too many sick leaves and that theyre being forced to work even in their illn...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...onclusion could otherwise be flawed and cant be held to be truthful.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, then, well, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 348.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20402298851 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74332445028 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451149425287 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0004084943 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.611111111 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27777777778 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355381933249 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14059633177 0.0743258471296 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132551940175 0.0701772020484 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190024566583 0.128457276422 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11234731542 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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