Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. According to the Leeville Chamber of Commerce, these facts can be attributed to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of life in Leeville.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument
The leeville chamber of commerce claims that, the greater amount of sick days taken by workers and less stress-related illness is lower in his/her city compared to the big city of Masonton, is due to fact that Leeville people enjoys better health benefits and relatively relaxed pace of life. While the argument holds some merit, the fallacious vapid arguments and lack of evidences makes the conclusion naive. Thus answering the following three question might strengthen the conclusion drawn by the Leeville Chamber of Commerce.
First, what if the pedestrians Monsonton city is generally less motivated to work? It is possible that the city of Monsonton dwellers became complacent due to getting introduced into vast opportunities available in the big city. It might be possible that, the workers of Masonton city is taking sick days deceitfully and working second or third part-time jobs. Even, it is possible that, due to lack of stringent authority in the work-place, employees are taking advantage by getting excess sick days. If any of these two is a possibility, the conclusion loses its credibility.
Secondly, Is the assumption that the small town of Leeville and the large city of masonton is comparable correct? In a big city, there are many more factors that can change its' populations tendency. For example, The city environment might be more comparatively warm and not suitable for prolonged working. Moreover, due to inhabiting a large number of population, the variety of viral diseases might be abundant in the Masonton city. Thus, the author needs to provide statistical and relevant data contrasting the health monitoring system of these tow cities, to make his/her conclusion valid.
Finally, Is it viable for the Masonton to provide health benefits similar to the health benefits provided by the Leeville city? Large population demands greater number of factors to consider for authority. It is possible that if Masonton city officials tries to provide better health benifits for everyone, the funding of the city might not be enough. Without shedding light to all the factors in the both city, the conclusion can not be deemed persuasive.
In conclusion, while the Leeville Chamber of commerce may have provided a sound conclusion regarding relativeness of stress induced workplace, more data and evidence is required before farm conclusion is reached in other aspects. If the above three questions are answered, it will be possible to fully evaluate the validity of this argument.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 2057 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.104 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.749 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.526 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 335, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ed working. Moreover, due to inhabiting a large number of population, the variety of viral diseas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 401.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3042394015 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81804559253 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503740648379 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2560245766 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.947368421 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1052631579 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246531609491 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721322091714 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088016877339 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135945575978 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596183787938 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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