The following appeared in an editorial in the Bayside Sentinel
"Bayside citizens need to consider raising local taxes if they want to see improvements in the Bayside School District. Test scores, graduation and college admission rates, and a number of other indicators have long made it clear that the Bayside School District is doing a poor job educating our youth. Our schools look run down. Windows are broken, bathrooms unusable, and classroom equipment hopelessly out of date. Yet just across the Bay, in New Harbor, school facilities are up-to-date and in good condition. The difference is money; New Harbor spends twenty-seven percent more per student than Bayside, and test scores and their indicators of student perormance are stronger in New Harbor as well."
However the statement that investment of money into the education of the youth will have a positive influence on the educational level might be true, the author tries to persuade us with a comparison argument that has some flaws in it.
As a first point of critique, the author confuses cause and effect. It is not the case that low test scores, graduation and college admission rates indicate a poor level of education. It might be the case that the absolute number of admissions and good grades is equal to the American average, but that the city of Bayside is overpopulated, thereby perhaps caus...
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Sentence: Another cause might be that there are mines in the city or as the name of the city lets us suspect, a harbor, where a lot of youth can find a job at an early age, causing low test score sdue to working and a high dropout rate and therefore low graduation rate.
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No. of Words: 458 350
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No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.354 4.6
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