The following appeared in a memo by the Mayor in the city of Hillview:
" In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill which is undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the city council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our towm attractive to this giant of car manufacturing"
The author of this argument states that to improve the employment scenario in Hillview, they should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in Hillview. He states that the landfill site would be perfect for this plant since it has been underdeveloped for decades. He adds that Autotech would provide work to thousands after Computech company abandoned tham last year. He states that authorizing a lerge campaign along with significant tax incentives would make Hillview attractive to the giant company Autotech. I disagree with the author's conclusion that Hillview's unemploym...
- The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books."We recommend that Monarch Books open a cafe in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because i 85
- Claim Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student s major field of study Reason Acquiring knowleadge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated 91
- "An ailing patient must have easy access to his doctor's record of similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access the ailing patient may better determine whether that doctor is competent to treat that medical condition". 95
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 87
- Claim An action is morally correct if the amount of good that results from the action is greater than the amount of bad that results from the action Reason When assessing the morality of an action the results of an action are more important than the inten 76
Sentence: He adds that Autotech would provide work to thousands after Computech company abandoned tham last year.
Error: tham Suggestion: them
Sentence: A lot of prolems can arise on the site.
Error: prolems Suggestion: problems
Sentence: He assumes that organising a large campaign and providing tax incentives would make Autotech come to Hillview.
Error: organising Suggestion: organizing
Sentence: Maybe Autotech needs civil engineers and mechanical egineers which Hillview cannot provide.
Error: egineers Suggestion: engineers
Sentence: Ultimately, the author can strenghten his argument by proving that the landfill site is perfect for construction purposes.
Error: strenghten Suggestion: strengthen
flaws:
No. of Words: 560 350 (write the essay in half an hour)
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.359 21.0
It is on top list:
http://www.testbig.com/essay-categories/gmatgre
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 6
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 39 15
No. of Words: 560 350
No. of Characters: 2896 1500
No. of Different Words: 233 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.865 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.171 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.798 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 206 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 180 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 143 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.359 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.506 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.359 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.273 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.42 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5